Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say "It depends" instead of "It's depends" and avoid repeating ideas. Also, add linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: It depends on the situation. However, I consider myself a quite patient person because I usually stay calm even when others make unreasonable demands.

提案: Improve grammar by using correct verb forms and plural/singular agreement. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Be more specific about why such demands make you impatient.

例: I feel impatient when people make unreasonable demands, such as requesting special imaging for a simple muscle strain. This frustrates me because it wastes time and resources unnecessarily.

提案: Avoid repeating similar words like "bored" and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to contrast ideas clearly. Also, be more specific about the solutions you find.

例: It depends on the task. If I enjoy it, I don't mind spending a long time on it, although I might get a little bored. However, if I dislike the task, it becomes annoying, so I try to find ways to make it more interesting.

提案: Use correct verb tenses and plural forms. Improve sentence clarity and coherence by using linking words. Provide more specific details about how patience is important in your job.

例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I meet around 100 patients each day. Dealing with patients who have aggressive emotions can be challenging, so I need to remain calm and understanding.

提案: Improve grammar, especially verb forms and agreement. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly. Be more specific about how your patience has changed and why.

例: No, I think I am less patient now than when I was a child. As adults, we often encounter more impatient people, which sometimes makes me feel frustrated and irritated.

× It's depends on the topic we are talking about.

✓ It depends on the topic we are talking about.

The modal verb 'It's' is incorrect here; 'It' should be used as the subject with the verb 'depends' to agree in present tense. 'It's' is a contraction of 'It is', which is not appropriate before 'depends'.

× So I would say that I am quite patient person.

✓ So I would say that I am quite a patient person.

The noun 'person' is singular and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× When the other parties asking for unreasonable demand, like wanting to get special imaging when you just came for a muscle strain, that's quite ridiculous.

✓ When the other parties are asking for unreasonable demands, like wanting to get special imaging when you just came for a muscle strain, that's quite ridiculous.

The verb 'asking' needs the auxiliary verb 'are' to form the present continuous tense. Also, 'demand' should be plural 'demands' to agree with 'unreasonable'.

× When the other parties asking for unreasonable demand, like wanting to get special imaging when you just came for a muscle strain, that's quite ridiculous.

✓ When the other parties are asking for unreasonable demands, like wanting to get special imaging when you just came for a muscle strain, that's quite ridiculous.

The noun 'demand' should be plural 'demands' to match the plural subject 'other parties'.

× Sometime I get frustrated.

✓ Sometimes I get frustrated.

The adverb 'Sometime' is incorrect; the correct form is 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency.

× If it's something I like, I don't mind doing them for a long time, maybe I will just be bored.

✓ If it's something I like, I don't mind doing it for a long time, maybe I will just be bored.

The pronoun 'them' is plural but refers to 'something' which is singular; it should be 'it'.

× But if it's something I don't like, it would be really annoying and bored.

✓ But if it's something I don't like, it would be really annoying and boring.

The adjective 'bored' describes a feeling of a person, but here it should describe the activity, so 'boring' is correct.

× I have to tackle with many people in the same day, around 100 patient per day as a doctor.

✓ I have to tackle many people in the same day, around 100 patients per day as a doctor.

The noun 'patient' should be plural 'patients' to agree with the number '100'. Also, 'tackle with' is incorrect; 'tackle' does not require 'with'.

× I have to tackle with many people in the same day, around 100 patient per day as a doctor.

✓ I have to tackle many people in the same day, around 100 patients per day as a doctor.

The verb 'tackle' should not be followed by the preposition 'with'.

× So meeting with patient with aggressive emotion I need.

✓ So when meeting with patients with aggressive emotions, I need patience.

The original sentence lacks proper structure and clarity. Adding 'when' and pluralizing 'patient' and 'emotion' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So meeting with patient with aggressive emotion I need.

✓ So meeting with patients with aggressive emotions, I need patience.

Both 'patient' and 'emotion' should be plural to match the context.

× Yes, my job required a lot of patience.

✓ Yes, my job requires a lot of patience.

The present tense 'requires' is appropriate here because the job is current, not past.

× No, I would say I lost patience more compared with when I was a child.

✓ No, I would say I have lost patience more compared with when I was a child.

The present perfect tense 'have lost' is appropriate to indicate a change from past to present.

× I think growing up adults meet more impatient person in their life and sometimes it make me frustrated and irritated.

✓ I think as adults grow up, they meet more impatient people in their lives and sometimes it makes me frustrated and irritated.

The sentence needs plural 'people' to match 'more', and 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also, 'growing up adults' is better expressed as 'as adults grow up'.