Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but try to avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Use simpler and clearer sentences. For example, say 'I have been patient since childhood because I respect people regardless of their age or background.'

例: Yes, I am a patient person because I respect everyone regardless of their age or background. Since childhood, I have always tried to stay calm and understanding in different situations.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid complicated sentences. For example, say 'I feel impatient when people cause unnecessary trouble or disrespect others, especially elders and children.'

例: I feel impatient when people make unnecessary problems or disrespect older people and children. It makes me want to correct their behavior.

提案: Your answer is a bit confusing and repetitive. Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid repeating words. For example, say 'Sometimes I feel irritated when I do something for a long time because my body needs rest. It is important to take breaks to relax.'

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I sometimes feel irritated because my body needs rest. Therefore, I think it is important to take breaks to relax and refresh.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammar errors and incomplete sentences. Try to answer directly and clearly. For example, say 'I am not working now because I am studying, but I believe many jobs require patience because tasks can be difficult.'

例: I am currently a student, so I don't have a job yet. However, I think many jobs need patience because some tasks can be challenging to finish.

提案: Your answer is good but has some repetition and minor grammar mistakes. Try to avoid repeating words and use correct forms. For example, say 'Yes, I am more patient now because my family taught me to be kind and patient in all situations.'

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because my family members are kind and humble. They taught me to be patient and good in every situation.

× I respect each people in their own way despite of having any age group or ethics or classes.

✓ I respect each person in their own way regardless of age group, ethnicity, or class.

The word 'each' should be followed by a singular noun 'person' not the plural 'people'. Also, 'despite of' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'regardless of'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× From my childhood I have been a remark a good patient person in.

✓ Since my childhood, I have been known as a very patient person.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'I have been a remark a good patient person in' is incorrect structure. The corrected sentence uses proper phrasing to express the intended meaning.

× While people trying to create a scene that is not so needed in that time and while some someone disrespect the older people or children, that makes me feel impassioned to fight with them to teach them a lesson.

✓ When people try to create a scene that is unnecessary at that time, and when someone disrespects older people or children, it makes me feel impatient and want to confront them to teach them a lesson.

The original sentence has pronoun errors ('some someone'), verb form errors ('trying' instead of 'try'), and word choice errors ('impatient' instead of 'impassioned'). The correction fixes these issues for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Sometimes I feel so irritated and so happy to do something for a long time because our body needs need to rest for for some hour.

✓ Sometimes I feel both irritated and happy to do something for a long time because our body needs to rest for some hours.

The phrase 'needs need to rest for for some hour' contains repetition and incorrect preposition usage. 'For some hour' should be 'for some hours' to indicate duration. The correction removes repetition and adjusts prepositions and quantifiers.

× It is it is essential to keep our body some space, some time to relax.

✓ It is essential to give our body some space and time to relax.

The phrase 'keep our body some space' is incorrect; the verb 'give' fits better with 'space and time'. The correction improves naturalness and grammatical correctness.

× Well I don't work for now because I'm still studying to get a degree so I think some job require to be patient because sometimes work can be so difficult to complete the task so it need to be.

✓ Well, I don't work right now because I'm still studying to get a degree, but I think some jobs require patience because sometimes work can be difficult to complete, so it needs to be done patiently.

The original sentence has modal verb and subject-verb agreement errors ('some job require', 'it need to be'). The correction fixes these by using correct plural forms and modal verb usage, improving clarity.

× Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because it is in my nature and also my family members are very, very humble and kind, kind people.

✓ Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because it is in my nature, and also my family members are very humble and kind people.

The repetition of 'kind, kind' is unnecessary. The sentence is corrected by removing redundancy for better fluency.

× They they taught me to be a good person, to have patient in any situations.

✓ They taught me to be a good person and to have patience in any situation.

'Patient' is an adjective; the noun 'patience' should be used here. Also, 'any situations' should be singular 'any situation' for correct quantifier usage.