Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks natural English phrasing and contains redundancy. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating the same idea, and use correct grammar. For example, say "Yes, I am a patient person, but I believe patience is necessary only in certain situations."

例: Yes, I am a patient person, but I believe patience is necessary only in certain situations. For instance, when dealing with difficult people, I try to stay calm and understanding.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Focus on expressing your feelings clearly with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I feel impatient when people are dishonest or try to hide the truth because honesty is very important to me.

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but could be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect your feelings and actions, and avoid repeating similar phrases.

例: I feel a bit stressed and uncomfortable when I have to do something for a long time; however, I try to stay positive and focus on improving myself by solving problems.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrases. Try to be more specific and use correct expressions. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: Yes, my job as a realtor requires a lot of patience because I communicate with clients daily, and sometimes they make difficult decisions or cause delays.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to show contrast and explain your development clearly.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I used to be a bit aggressive living with my family. Now that I live independently, I have learned to solve problems calmly.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I am.

The question 'Are you a patient person?' requires a 'be' verb response, not 'do'. 'Yes, I do' is incorrect here because 'do' is used for actions, not states or qualities. The correct response is 'Yes, I am.'

× I am patient person, so much patient person and I think it's not necessary.

✓ I am a patient person, a very patient person, and I think it's not always necessary.

The noun 'person' is singular and requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'so much patient person' is incorrect; 'very patient person' is the correct adjective usage. The phrase 'not necessary' needs 'always' to clarify meaning.

× I am trying to be patient in every situations without difficult.

✓ I am trying to be patient in every situation without difficulty.

'Situations' should be singular after 'every'. 'Without difficult' is incorrect; the noun form 'difficulty' is needed here.

× When someone is trying to fear someone's truth and when someone is trying to realize about someone, that's too much important for me.

✓ When someone is trying to hide someone's truth and when someone is trying to find out about someone, that's very important to me.

The verb 'fear' is incorrect here; likely 'hide' or 'conceal' is intended. 'Realize about someone' is incorrect; 'find out about someone' is correct. 'Too much important' should be 'very important'. Also, 'important for me' is better as 'important to me'.

× I feel a little bit discomfort, but I always try to improve myself and I always try to solve some problems, so I always work on myself.

✓ I feel a little discomfort, but I always try to improve myself and solve some problems, so I always work on myself.

'A little bit discomfort' is incorrect; 'a little discomfort' is correct because 'discomfort' is an uncountable noun. Also, 'try to improve myself and I always try to solve' is repetitive; combining is better.

× Sometimes they are not through, sometimes they are doing something bad, but I always need to be patient with them.

✓ Sometimes they are not thorough, sometimes they are doing something bad, but I always need to be patient with them.

'Not through' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'not thorough' meaning not careful or complete.

× Now I am living with without them.

✓ Now I am living without them.

'Living with without them' is incorrect; 'with' should be removed to make the sentence correct.

× Now I learn how solve my problem, so I'm patient.

✓ Now I have learned how to solve my problems, so I'm patient.

The verb phrase 'learn how solve' is missing 'to'. Also, 'learn' should be in present perfect 'have learned' to indicate experience up to now. 'Problem' should be plural 'problems' for general meaning.