Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够流畅，有重复和语法错误，且内容不够完整。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并补充具体细节。

例: I am not a very patient person because I tend to want to finish tasks quickly. For example, when I work on university coursework, I try to complete it as fast as possible to avoid wasting time.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然，建议使用更准确的语法结构，并具体说明原因。

例: I often feel impatient when working on group university coursework because I am not very good at teamwork. Collaborating with many students makes me nervous and tired.

提案: 回答中表达不够连贯，且有语法错误。建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，并注意语法准确。

例: I feel exhausted and nervous when I have to do something for a long time because I start to wonder if it is worth the effort. I worry about failing or wasting my time.

提案: 回答中有语法错误且表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地说明现状和未来职业需求，注意语法和句子结构。

例: I am currently a university student majoring in finance and accounting. In the future, my job will likely require a lot of patience and concentration, especially in accounting.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，清楚表达观点并补充具体细节。

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to be impatient and wanted to achieve goals quickly, but after experiencing failures, I have learned that success requires passion and patience.

× For example, when I'm doing tasks like the university coursework, I will I I really want to do this quickly 'cause if it takes too much time, I will.

✓ For example, when I'm doing tasks like the university coursework, I really want to do this quickly 'cause if it takes too much time, I will.

句中“I will I I really want”存在重复和语法错误，应删除多余的“I will”，使句子通顺。

× the university coursework in the group will makes me really impatient 'cause I'm not a really teamworker, so working with lots of students may makes me nervous and exhausted.

✓ the university coursework in the group will make me really impatient 'cause I'm not a really teamworker, so working with lots of students may make me nervous and exhausted.

动词make在第三人称单数情形下，助动词will和may后应使用动词原形，不能加-s。

× I'm not a really teamworker, so working with lots of students may makes me nervous and exhausted.

✓ I'm not really a teamworker, so working with lots of students may make me nervous and exhausted.

形容词really修饰名词teamworker时，位置应在冠词后，正确表达为“not really a teamworker”。

× Is it worth it or is it worth to take so much time?

✓ Is it worth it or is it worth taking so much time?

短语“worth”后应接动名词形式，不能接不定式“to take”。

× Well, I'm not a work, I'm not working right now, but actually university student majoring in the finance and accounting.

✓ Well, I'm not working right now, but actually a university student majoring in finance and accounting.

“I'm not a work”表达错误，work是动词或不可数名词，不能用作可数名词。应去掉该部分，补充冠词a和名词university student。

× When I was a child, I'm just really childish and always eager to to achieve the goals quickly.

✓ When I was a child, I was just really childish and always eager to achieve the goals quickly.

时态错误，描述过去应使用过去时“was”，而非现在时“I'm”。

× But now after experience some fails, I realize that some things don't some success need my passion to do.

✓ But now after experiencing some failures, I realize that some successes need my passion to achieve.

“experience”应使用动名词形式“experiencing”；“fails”应为复数名词“failures”；句子结构不完整，需调整表达使其通顺。