Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you should avoid redundancy and improve vocabulary. For example, instead of repeating 'I always', you can use synonyms or restructure sentences. Also, 'require punctuation' should be 'require punctuality'. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I'm not a patient person because I dislike waiting and prefer others to be prompt. For instance, during important meetings, I insist on punctuality from attendees so that we can save time and I can focus on completing my other tasks.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'late in submitting tax' and 'attendee late at meetings'. Use correct expressions and linking words to improve coherence. Also, be more specific about the situations.

例: It depends on the environment. For example, at school, I feel impatient when a team member submits their work late. Similarly, at work, I get frustrated when colleagues arrive late to meetings or delay completing their tasks.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing such as 'spend hours to immersion it' and 'put much interested into'. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to contrast ideas.

例: It depends on the activity. If it's something I enjoy, I can spend hours immersed in it. However, if it's a task I am less interested in and have a deadline, I tend to feel impatient and try to finish it as quickly as possible.

提案: Your answer is relevant and shows good ideas, but the last sentence is incomplete and awkward ('until they are fully'). Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

例: I don't have a job yet since I'm still a student, but if I become a teacher, which is my dream job, I believe patience is essential. Some students struggle to learn new concepts, so I would patiently explain the material multiple times until they fully understand.

提案: Your answer is mostly clear but contains a confusing phrase 'behave with others appropriately and impatiently' which contradicts your point. Also, avoid redundancy and improve vocabulary. Use linking words to contrast past and present.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Back then, my curiosity made me impatient and demanding; for example, I would immediately beg my parents to buy candy. However, now I have gained more knowledge and understand how to behave appropriately and patiently with others.

× I always seek for agility in others.

✓ I always seek agility in others.

The verb 'seek' is directly followed by the object without the preposition 'for'. Using 'seek for' is incorrect; the correct form is 'seek' plus the object.

× I always require punctuation in attendees.

✓ I always require punctuality from attendees.

The word 'punctuation' refers to symbols in writing, but the intended meaning is 'punctuality', which means being on time. Also, 'require punctuality from attendees' is the correct phrase.

× I always require punctuation in attendees.

✓ I always require punctuality from attendees.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to indicate the source of punctuality is 'from'.

× I always feel impatient when a team member is late in submitting tax.

✓ I always feel impatient when a team member is late in submitting tax returns.

The phrase 'submitting tax' is incomplete; it should be 'submitting tax returns' or 'paying taxes'. However, this is more about word choice than preposition. The preposition 'in' is acceptable here but could be improved to 'with' or omitted.

× At work, I also feel impatient when an attendee late at meetings and in finishing their works.

✓ At work, I also feel impatient when an attendee is late to meetings and in finishing their work.

The word 'attendee' is singular, so the verb 'late' needs 'is' to form 'is late'. Also, 'works' should be 'work' as an uncountable noun in this context.

× At work, I also feel impatient when an attendee late at meetings and in finishing their works.

✓ At work, I also feel impatient when an attendee is late to meetings and in finishing their work.

The verb 'late' is incorrectly used without the auxiliary verb 'is' for third person singular subject 'attendee'.

× If I have time to do my favorite thing, I will spend hours to immersion it.

✓ If I have time to do my favorite thing, I will spend hours immersing myself in it.

The verb 'spend' is followed by a gerund (-ing form), so 'to immersion' is incorrect. Also, 'immersion' is a noun; the verb form is 'immerse'. The correct phrase is 'spend hours immersing myself in it'.

× If I have time to do my favorite thing, I will spend hours to immersion it.

✓ If I have time to do my favorite thing, I will spend hours immersing myself in it.

The preposition 'in' is needed after 'immersing myself' to indicate the activity or object of immersion.

× I think that I don't put much interested into, I will feel impatient and put efforts in to do it as fast as possible.

✓ I think that if I am not very interested in it, I will feel impatient and put effort into doing it as fast as possible.

The phrase 'put much interested into' is incorrect; it should be 'not very interested in'. Also, 'put efforts in to do' should be 'put effort into doing'.

× I think that I don't put much interested into, I will feel impatient and put efforts in to do it as fast as possible.

✓ I think that if I am not very interested in it, I will feel impatient and put effort into doing it as fast as possible.

The prepositions 'into' and 'in to' are incorrectly used; the correct preposition is 'into' followed by a gerund.

× Honestly, I don't have a job because I'm still a student, but if I could be a teacher, which is my dream job, I think I need to be patient with my students because there are students who are frustrated in acquiring new knowledge, so I would be there to teach them again and again until they are fully.

✓ Honestly, I don't have a job because I'm still a student, but if I could be a teacher, which is my dream job, I think I need to be patient with my students because some students get frustrated when acquiring new knowledge, so I would be there to teach them again and again until they fully understand.

The phrase 'frustrated in acquiring' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'frustrated when acquiring'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'until they are fully' which is incomplete; it should be 'until they fully understand' or similar.

× Honestly, I don't have a job because I'm still a student, but if I could be a teacher, which is my dream job, I think I need to be patient with my students because there are students who are frustrated in acquiring new knowledge, so I would be there to teach them again and again until they are fully.

✓ Honestly, I don't have a job because I'm still a student, but if I could be a teacher, which is my dream job, I think I would need to be patient with my students because some students get frustrated when acquiring new knowledge, so I would be there to teach them again and again until they fully understand.

The sentence is long and somewhat awkward; changing 'I think I need' to 'I think I would need' fits the conditional mood better. Also, the sentence ending is incomplete and needs completion for clarity.

× But now I have more knowledge and I know how to behave with others appropriately and impatiently.

✓ But now I have more knowledge and I know how to behave with others appropriately and patiently.

The adverb 'impatiently' contradicts the intended meaning of behaving well with others. The correct adverb is 'patiently'.