Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and lacks clarity. Try to use correct verb tenses and complete sentences. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about how you have become more patient.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. As I have grown older, I have learned to stay calm and think carefully before solving problems. For example, I no longer rush into decisions but take my time to evaluate the situation.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. Also, complete your sentences and provide specific examples.

例: I feel impatient when I am in noisy environments because I find it hard to concentrate. For instance, when children shout loudly in a library, it makes me lose my temper because I expect the place to be quiet.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some awkward phrasing and grammar mistakes. Use clearer expressions and avoid vague words like 'assaulted'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel tired and need a break. For example, after studying for three hours straight, I take a short rest to refresh myself.

提案: Your answer is on topic but has grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Try to use complete sentences and explain clearly how your job requires patience, with specific examples.

例: Yes, my job as a nurse definitely requires patience. For example, when I give injections or perform medical procedures, I need to stay calm and be kind to my patients to make them feel comfortable.

提案: Your answer has good content but is difficult to understand due to grammar mistakes and unclear phrasing. Use past and present tenses correctly and organize your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. When I was younger, I often lost my temper and shouted at my parents. However, now I can control my emotions better and stay calm, which helps me focus on tasks more easily.

× When I grow up I become more and more to be patient.

✓ When I grow up, I will become more and more patient.

The sentence talks about a future event, so the verb 'become' should be in the future tense 'will become'. Also, 'to be patient' is unnecessary here; 'patient' as an adjective suffices.

× I more calm and know what to do and and what to solve the problem.

✓ I am calmer and know what to do and how to solve the problem.

The phrase 'I more calm' is incorrect; it should be 'I am calmer' to correctly use the comparative adjective. Also, 'what to solve the problem' is incorrect; it should be 'how to solve the problem'.

× For example, I don't be quick and fast in.

✓ For example, I am not quick and fast.

The verb 'be' cannot be used with 'don't' in this way. The correct form is 'I am not quick and fast.' The phrase 'in' at the end is incomplete and unnecessary.

× I can't stand the space that all of noise and I can control my temper whenever I see I saw children shout or yell with their children.

✓ I can't stand noisy places, and I can't control my temper whenever I see children shouting or yelling.

The phrase 'the space that all of noise' is incorrect; 'noisy places' is clearer. Also, 'I can control' contradicts the meaning; it should be 'I can't control'. The phrase 'I see I saw children shout or yell with their children' is confusing and redundant; simplified to 'I see children shouting or yelling'.

× For example, when I'm in library, I hate the.

✓ For example, when I'm in the library, I hate it.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly; adding 'it' completes the thought.

× I think maybe I feel tired or assaulted after I study for a long time or I do some the same activity.

✓ I think maybe I feel tired or exhausted after I study for a long time or do the same activity.

The word 'assaulted' is incorrect in this context; 'exhausted' fits better. Also, 'some the same activity' is incorrect; it should be 'the same activity'.

× So for example I usually study about 3 hours and I can take a break so I feel so tired.

✓ For example, I usually study for about 3 hours and then take a break because I feel very tired.

Added 'for' before 'about 3 hours' to indicate duration. Also, 'so tired' is better expressed as 'very tired' here. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Yes definitely because I'm a nurse so I need to be patient and on how know how to control my temper before patients and for example when I give injection or take some procedures I will be patient and kind to.

✓ Yes, definitely, because I'm a nurse, so I need to be patient and know how to control my temper with patients. For example, when I give injections or perform procedures, I am patient and kind.

The phrase 'on how know how' is incorrect; it should be 'know how'. 'Before patients' is better as 'with patients'. 'Give injection' should be plural 'give injections'. 'Take some procedures' is incorrect; 'perform procedures' is correct. The sentence ending 'kind to' is incomplete and corrected.

× Yes definitely when I was a child I can control my temper and I often shout with my parents so but nowadays I now I can easily control my temper and to be more calm and patient to easy to focus and do anything.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I couldn't control my temper and often shouted at my parents, but nowadays I can easily control my temper and be calmer and more patient, which helps me focus and do anything.

The sentence mixes past and present incorrectly. 'I can control' in past context should be 'I couldn't control'. 'Shout with my parents' is incorrect; 'shouted at my parents' is correct. Added commas and conjunctions for clarity and corrected verb forms.