Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, làm cho ý nghĩa không được truyền đạt một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sắp xếp ý hợp lý hơn.

例: No, I am not a very patient person. I tend to get angry easily over small things. However, I am trying to improve my patience and control my emotions better.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm rõ ý của bạn.

例: I feel impatient when people don't pay attention to what I'm saying, especially when it's important. It makes me frustrated because I want them to understand my point clearly.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng cần tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Bạn cũng nên mở rộng ý với ví dụ hoặc giải thích thêm.

例: It depends on the task. If it's complex, I feel excited and challenged. However, if it's too easy, I get bored quickly because it doesn't engage me enough.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn bị lặp từ và chưa hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên hoàn thiện câu trả lời, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh để truyền đạt ý hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I believe every job requires patience because it is essential for success. That's why I am working on improving my patience and self-control.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Bạn cũng có thể thêm ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ ý.

例: Yes, definitely. I am much more patient now than when I was a child. I used to have tantrums over small things, but now I can control my emotions much better.

× I'm easy to and we are small things which make me feel bad.

✓ I'm easy to get angry over small things which make me feel bad.

The phrase 'I'm easy to and we are small things' is incomplete and unclear. The correct form is 'I'm easy to get angry over small things' where 'get angry' is the correct verb phrase. The error is related to incorrect verb + -ing form usage and sentence structure.

× I'm I'm practicing to improve my patience and my ability to control my feeling.

✓ I'm practicing to improve my patience and my ability to control my feelings.

The word 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' because it refers to emotions in general. Also, the repetition 'I'm I'm' is a mistake. The verb 'practicing' is correctly used here.

× Like it drives me mad and I don't want it to happen.

✓ It drives me mad, and I don't want it to happen.

Starting a sentence with 'Like' in this context is incorrect. The sentence should be connected properly to express the idea clearly. This is a sentence structure error.

× So I think the concentration of the others on my stories.

✓ So I think the concentration of others on my stories matters.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb. Adding 'matters' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× And if it is too easy to do to deal with, I would be bored.

✓ And if it is too easy to deal with, I would be bored.

The phrase 'to do to deal with' is redundant and incorrect. The correct preposition is 'to deal with' without 'to do'.

× Yes, I think all jobs require patience because this is an important an important feature to make people successful.

✓ Yes, I think all jobs require patience because it is an important feature to make people successful.

The phrase 'this is an important an important feature' is repetitive and 'this' is vague. Replacing 'this' with 'it' and removing repetition improves clarity.

× Yes definitely. I think I'm much more patient compared to I used to.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think I'm much more patient compared to how I used to be.

The phrase 'compared to I used to' is incorrect. It should be 'compared to how I used to be' to correctly compare past and present states.

× When I was a kid I easily had a tantrum for small things but now I can control my feeling easily.

✓ When I was a kid, I easily had tantrums over small things, but now I can control my feelings easily.

The word 'tantrum' should be plural 'tantrums' because it refers to multiple instances. Also, 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to refer to emotions in general.