Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，有重复和语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I am patient when doing things I enjoy, like playing computer games or watching live streams. However, I find it hard to stay patient with boring tasks.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议避免重复，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I feel impatient with repetitive tasks like cooking and doing housework because they are quite boring for me.

提案: 回答结构较好，但有语法错误和表达不够自然。建议注意语法准确性，简化句子，使表达更清晰。

例: It depends. If the task is related to my future or career, I feel motivated. But if it's boring, I might feel upset.

提案: 回答较为完整，但用词和表达可以更自然。建议使用更具体的词汇，避免泛泛而谈。

例: Yes, definitely. As a student, I often work on long-term projects that require a lot of focus and patience.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用正确的时态和词汇。

例: Yes, I am more patient now because as I grow older, I have become more mature and understanding.

× but when I when it comes to bring boring things, I don't think I can maintain my patience level.

✓ but when it comes to boring things, I don't think I can maintain my patience level.

这里的错误是动词形式错误，'bring' 应该改为动名词形式 'boring'，因为短语 'when it comes to' 后面应接动名词。

× Such such things are very boring for me, so I I feel impatient about them.

✓ Such things are very boring for me, so I feel impatient about them.

这里重复了 'such'，应删除多余的词。虽然这不是严格的语法错误，但属于句子结构错误，影响表达清晰。

× Well it depends, if I need to do something about my future and my career I will be motivated. However if when it comes to boring things I maybe just feel upset about it.

✓ Well, it depends. If I need to do something about my future and my career, I will be motivated. However, when it comes to boring things, I may just feel upset about it.

原句中 'if when' 结构错误，应改为单一连词 'when'。另外，'maybe' 应为情态动词 'may'，且句子缺少逗号和句号，影响句子结构和表达。

× As students we always have some long term project to do, so it requires us to focus and be patient about everything.

✓ As students, we always have some long-term projects to do, so it requires us to focus and be patient with everything.

'patient about' 用法不正确，正确搭配是 'patient with'。另外，'long term project' 应为复数 'long-term projects'，且 'long-term' 需要连字符。

× As students we always have some long term project to do, so it requires us to focus and be patient about everything.

✓ As students, we always have some long-term projects to do, so it requires us to focus and be patient with everything.

'some' 后面应接复数名词，'project' 应改为复数 'projects'。

× Yes, I think I'm more patient than before because as time flies our mind become more becomes more mature and help us to be more patient about some everything.

✓ Yes, I think I'm more patient than before because as time flies, our minds become more mature and help us to be more patient about everything.

'mind' 应为复数 'minds'，主谓一致；'become' 和 'becomes' 重复，应保留 'become'；'some everything' 词语重复，应删除 'some'。