Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が繰り返しで冗長になっており、具体的な例や理由が不足しています。より自然で効果的な回答にするために、具体的な経験や理由を加え、簡潔に述べることを意識しましょう。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can stay calm even in stressful situations, such as waiting in long lines or dealing with difficult tasks.

提案: 回答が意味不明で文法的にも誤りが多く、内容が伝わりにくいです。質問に直接答え、具体的な理由や状況を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

例: I feel impatient when people repeat the same mistakes because it shows they are not paying attention, which can be very frustrating.

提案: 内容は伝わりますが、文法の誤りや表現の不自然さがあります。接続詞を使って論理的に話をつなげ、より自然な表現を心がけましょう。

例: I usually dislike doing the same task for a long time because I am curious about many things, so focusing on one thing can be quite boring and challenging for me.

提案: 回答が途中で終わっているように感じられ、文法や語彙の選択に改善の余地があります。完全な文で理由を述べ、語彙の幅を広げる練習をしましょう。

例: Although I am a student, I believe patience is important because studying for long hours is necessary to achieve good grades and get into a university.

提案: 文法の誤りが多く、意味がやや不明瞭です。過去と現在の比較を明確にし、正しい文法で表現する練習をしましょう。

例: I don't think I have become more patient than when I was a child because I still find it hard to focus on one thing for a long time due to my curiosity.

× I don't have any story about my patientness, but I think I am a patient person.

✓ I don't have any story about my patience, but I think I am a patient person.

The word 'patientness' is incorrect; the correct noun form is 'patience'. 'Patient' is an adjective, and its noun form is 'patience'.

× Someone doing same things with Pedro, I think it's a very annoying for me because it means they don't have.

✓ Someone doing the same things as Pedro, I think it's very annoying for me because it means they don't have.

The phrase 'doing same things with Pedro' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'the same things as Pedro'. Also, 'a very annoying' should be 'very annoying' because 'annoying' is an adjective here, not a noun.

× Act like calamari.

✓ They act like calamari.

The sentence lacks a subject and verb agreement. 'Act like calamari' is incomplete; adding 'They' as the subject makes it a complete sentence.

× I actually dislike to do something for a long time because I have a lot of curiosity, but focusing on one thing is a little bored so I think it's difficult.

✓ I actually dislike doing something for a long time because I have a lot of curiosity, but focusing on one thing is a little boring so I think it's difficult.

The verb 'dislike' should be followed by the gerund form 'doing' not the infinitive 'to do'. Also, 'a little bored' is incorrect; it should be 'a little boring' because it describes the feeling caused by focusing on one thing.

× So hardworking for a long time is very.

✓ So working hard for a long time is very important.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Hardworking' is an adjective, but here a verb phrase 'working hard' is needed. Also, the sentence lacks a complement; adding 'important' completes the thought.

× I think I don't change when from when I was a child because in elementary school I couldn't doing something for a long time and I have a lot of curiosity and now it's also same.

✓ I think I haven't changed since I was a child because in elementary school I couldn't do something for a long time and I had a lot of curiosity and now it's the same.

The verb 'change' should be in present perfect 'haven't changed' to indicate a state continuing from past to present. 'Couldn't doing' is incorrect; it should be 'couldn't do'. Also, 'now it's also same' should be 'now it's the same' for correct expression.