Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi lặp lại và thiếu sự tự nhiên. Bạn nên tránh lặp lại ý giống nhau và sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy thêm một câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi và một hoặc hai câu chi tiết hỗ trợ, sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: No, I am not a very patient person. For example, I often get frustrated when I face difficult problems that take a long time to solve.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp lại câu hỏi trong câu trả lời và chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ như lỗi số nhiều và danh từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và dùng từ vựng phù hợp hơn với ngữ cảnh.

例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for a long time, such as standing in a queue or when appointments are delayed, because it makes me frustrated and restless.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ. Bạn nên chú ý chia động từ cho đúng và sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: When I have to do something that takes a long time, I usually feel frustrated and impatient because I prefer to use my time efficiently.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là cách dùng thì và cấu trúc câu. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để thể hiện sự tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: I don't have a job at the moment because I am a student, but I believe that patience is important in any job to achieve success.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ và hiện tại đúng cách, đồng thời tránh lỗi sai về động từ và giới từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Definitely yes, I am more patient now. When I was a child, I used to get frustrated in situations I didn't like, but as I grew up, I realized the importance of being patient.

× When it comes to a difficult situation, I used to lose control because it takes me a long time to solve it.

✓ When it comes to a difficult situation, I lose control because it takes me a long time to solve it.

The phrase 'used to lose' implies a past habit, but the context suggests a current tendency. The present simple tense 'lose' is appropriate here to express a habitual action in the present.

× It usually make me feel frustrated and a bit noisy.

✓ It usually makes me feel frustrated and a bit noisy.

The subject 'It' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' to agree in number. 'Make' is incorrect for singular third person.

× It make me anxious because I prefer to use my time efficiently.

✓ It makes me anxious because I prefer to use my time efficiently.

The singular subject 'It' requires the verb 'makes' to agree in number. 'Make' is incorrect for singular third person.

× Well, whenever it's come to something too long, I feel frustrated and impatient because it takes me too much time and it make me anxious because I prefer to use my time efficiently.

✓ Well, whenever it comes to something too long, I feel frustrated and impatient because it takes me too much time and it makes me anxious because I prefer to use my time efficiently.

The phrase 'it's come to' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'it comes to' to indicate the subject and verb agreement and proper tense.

× Well, I'm currently don't have any kind of job, I'm still a student but I think in any job need to be patient because it's one of the most important part to success.

✓ Well, I currently don't have any kind of job, I'm still a student but I think any job needs patience because it's one of the most important parts to success.

The phrase 'I'm currently don't have' is incorrect; 'I currently don't have' is correct. Also, 'in any job need to be patient' is incorrect; it should be 'any job needs patience' for subject-verb agreement and correct noun usage.

× Definitely yes I have.

✓ Definitely, yes I have.

A comma is needed after 'Definitely' to separate the interjection from the rest of the sentence for clarity.

× When I was a kid I used to frustrated when it comes to some situation that I don't like.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to get frustrated when it came to some situations that I didn't like.

The verb 'used to' should be followed by the base form 'get' not 'frustrated'. Also, 'comes' should be in past tense 'came' to match the past context, and 'don't like' should be 'didn't like' for past tense consistency.

× But when I grown up I think about it a lot that I have to be more patient.

✓ But when I grew up, I thought about it a lot and realized that I had to be more patient.

The phrase 'when I grown up' is incorrect; the past tense 'grew up' is needed. Also, 'I think' should be past tense 'I thought' to maintain past narrative, and 'I have to' should be 'I had to' for past tense consistency.