Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: No, I am not a patient person because I easily get distracted. For example, when I do my homework and hear a sound, I try to remember it and lose focus, which makes me feel impatient.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản và thêm các chi tiết cụ thể để làm rõ ý.

例: The melodies of songs make me feel impatient because I like listening to music. When I hear a melody I don't recognize, I try hard to figure it out, which distracts me.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá dài và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

例: I usually feel impatient when I have to do something for a long time. However, if the subject interests me, I can stay focused and patient for longer periods.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và thêm các chi tiết cụ thể để làm rõ ý.

例: Yes, my job requires me to be patient because professionalism is important. Being impatient can lead to mistakes, so I try to stay calm and focused.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng bị lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I understand the importance of patience. It helps me stay calm and focus on my work.

× I'm not a patient person 'cause I'm very dissuaded to do a lot of things.

✓ I'm not a patient person because I'm easily discouraged from doing a lot of things.

The conjunction 'cause' is informal and the phrase 'very dissuaded to do' is incorrect. Use 'because' for clarity and 'easily discouraged from doing' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× For example, that if I do my homework, but I just hear sound which is can memorize me and I will be attracted by that sounds and try to try hard to remember what it is and I can feel impatient for that time.

✓ For example, if I do my homework but hear a sound that catches my attention, I get distracted and try hard to remember what it is, which makes me feel impatient at that time.

Incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing make the sentence unclear. 'Hear sound which is can memorize me' is incorrect; it should be 'hear a sound that catches my attention'. Also, 'impatient for that time' should be 'impatient at that time'.

× Are the things that make me can impatient that is the melodies of the songs 'cause I'm a person who likes listening and listening music to the music and I try to hear lots of musical so when I just hear a melody which can't help me to figure it out and.

✓ The things that make me impatient are the melodies of songs because I'm a person who likes listening to music, and I try to listen to many songs, so when I hear a melody I can't figure out, it bothers me.

Incorrect pronoun usage and sentence structure. 'Make me can impatient' is incorrect; it should be 'make me impatient'. Also, 'listening and listening music to the music' is redundant and incorrect; use 'listening to music'.

× For me, a girl who is very impatient, I guess that I would feel impatient in about spending lot a lot of time to learning because that I thought that if that subject can attract me to learn, I can be impatient to learn that job for a long time and more.

✓ For me, as a very impatient girl, I guess I would feel impatient spending a lot of time learning because I think that if a subject attracts me, I can be patient to study it for a long time and more.

Incorrect quantifiers like 'lot a lot of time to learning' should be 'a lot of time learning'. Also, 'can be impatient to learn' contradicts the intended meaning; it should be 'can be patient to study'.

× Absolutely not in my job. I guess all of the jobs need to be a patient 'cause if you keep impatient you can do anything because all of the job needs a professional places, not a places for try for freeze.

✓ Absolutely not in my job. I guess all jobs require patience because if you remain impatient, you cannot do anything since all jobs need professional environments, not places for trial and error.

Incorrect pronouns and awkward phrasing. 'Need to be a patient' should be 'require patience'. 'Keep impatient you can do anything' is incorrect; it should be 'if you remain impatient, you cannot do anything'.

× So we need to patient and do it's better as we can so we can impatient for a small job.

✓ So we need to be patient and do our best so we don't get impatient over small tasks.

Incorrect prepositions and verb forms. 'Need to patient' should be 'need to be patient'. 'Do it's better as we can' is incorrect; use 'do our best'. 'Can impatient' is incorrect; use 'don't get impatient'.

× Absolutely, yes, because now I'm growing up and I know what is the important of to be a patients because if we can have a patience, we can stay calm and we can focusing on the work that we do.

✓ Absolutely, yes, because now I'm growing up and I know the importance of being patient because if we have patience, we can stay calm and focus on the work we do.

Incorrect pronouns and word forms. 'Important of to be a patients' should be 'importance of being patient'. 'We can focusing' should be 'we can focus'.

× So we need to be a full do. So we need to be a patient guys 'cause patients can do a lot of thinking.

✓ So we need to be fully committed. So we need to be patient because patience allows us to think deeply.

Incorrect pronouns and word choice. 'Be a full do' is unclear; 'be fully committed' is better. 'Be a patient guys' is incorrect; 'be patient' is correct. 'Patients can do a lot of thinking' should be 'patience allows us to think deeply'.