Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了耐心的主题，但语言不够自然，存在语法错误和重复词汇。建议简化句子结构，避免使用“uh”等填充词，并使用更准确的表达方式。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For instance, when my friends take a long time to get ready, I wait calmly without feeling annoyed.

提案: 回答内容不够清晰，语法错误较多，表达不连贯。建议直接回答问题，使用简单明了的句子，并提供具体原因。

例: I feel impatient when people are late without any reason because I value punctuality and respect for others' time.

提案: 回答中存在语法和表达错误，句子不连贯。建议使用清晰的句子表达感受，并举例说明。

例: Sometimes I feel tired when working on a task for a long time, but after finishing it, I feel satisfied and proud because I have learned a lot.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复，并具体说明耐心的重要性。

例: Yes, my job as a fashion designer requires a lot of patience because I have to conduct thorough research and create many sketches before finalizing a design.

提案: 回答表达了对比，但存在语法错误和重复。建议使用更准确的时态和表达方式，使句子更自然。

例: Yes, I am more patient now. When I was a child, I would get upset if a task took a week, but now I can focus on a project for a whole month without losing patience.

× I can uh, peaceful to waiting for them.

✓ I can peacefully wait for them.

这里错误地使用了形容词“peaceful”加不定式“to waiting”，正确用法是副词“peacefully”修饰动词“wait”，且动词应为原形。应使用副词+动词原形结构。

× I think there are nothing need to be really hurry unless we get prepare this.

✓ I think there is nothing that needs to be really hurried unless we get prepared for this.

“there are nothing”应为“there is nothing”，因为“nothing”是不可数单数；“need to be really hurry”中“hurry”应为形容词“hurried”；“get prepare”应为“get prepared”，使用过去分词作形容词。

× So if you are really slowly person, I think it's OK.

✓ So if you are really a slow person, I think it's OK.

“slowly”是副词，修饰动词；此处需用形容词“slow”修饰名词“person”，且“person”前需加不定冠词“a”。

× Yeah, I think maybe is a little tear on the physics day, but when this thing is finished, you, I, you look back, it's really interesting and nice and you can learn a lot of in this process.

✓ Yeah, I think maybe it is a little tiring on the physical day, but when this thing is finished, you look back, it's really interesting and nice and you can learn a lot in this process.

句子缺少主语“it”；“tear”应为“tiring”形容词；“physics day”应为“physical day”；“you, I, you look back”语序混乱，应简化为“you look back”；“learn a lot of”后缺少宾语，应为“learn a lot”。

× And when I do the project project, I need to research a lot of things like the primary research, the secondary research, and I need to draw a lot of sketch and then I need to do.

✓ And when I do the project, I need to research a lot of things like primary research, secondary research, and I need to draw a lot of sketches and then I need to do more.

“a lot of sketch”应为“a lot of sketches”，名词需复数；“the primary research”前冠词可省略；句尾“and then I need to do”不完整，需补充内容或改为“and then I need to do more”。

× When I was young if someone told me told me to do a thing, need use one week, I will feel terrible and I may be crying.

✓ When I was young, if someone told me to do a thing that needed one week, I would feel terrible and I might cry.

条件句中主句应使用过去将来时“would”，从句中“need”应为过去式“needed”；“may be crying”应为“might cry”，保持时态一致。

× But now I can continue do one job in a whole month.

✓ But now I can continue doing one job for a whole month.

“continue”后应接动名词“doing”而非动词原形“do”；“in a whole month”应为“for a whole month”，表示持续时间。