Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples, avoiding redundancy. Also, use correct grammar and sentence structure.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I remain calm even in stressful situations. For instance, when faced with challenges at work, I take time to think before reacting, which helps me handle problems effectively.

提案: Your answer covers the question but is a bit wordy and repetitive. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more concise. Also, try to avoid repeating the same idea multiple times.

例: I feel impatient when I have to stand in long queues or wait for someone who is late. These situations often make me stressed and cause me to lose my calmness.

提案: Your answer has many fillers and grammatical mistakes. Try to speak more fluently and clearly, using correct grammar. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details.

例: I sometimes feel irritated and frustrated when I have to do the same task for a long time, especially if it is repetitive. This can make me lose interest and feel uncomfortable.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and better structured. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, correct minor grammatical errors for clarity.

例: Yes, as a sales associate, I need to be patient because I interact with many customers daily. Some customers are pleasant, while others can be difficult, so I always remain calm and polite to handle every situation effectively.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has many grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts clearly, use correct grammar, and organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

例: I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. As a kid, I often got frustrated with small tasks like going to school. However, now I understand the importance of staying calm and have improved my ability to manage my emotions in different situations.

× I am easily handle my each and every situation by become a calm and patient person.

✓ I easily handle each and every situation by becoming a calm and patient person.

The verb 'handle' should not be preceded by 'am' here; instead, 'easily handle' is correct. Also, 'by become' should be 'by becoming' because after 'by' we use the gerund form of the verb.

× when I am standing in a long line at that time, sometimes I feel stressed and become impatient

✓ when I am standing in a long line, sometimes I feel stressed and become impatient

The phrase 'at that time' is unnecessary and awkward here; the sentence is clearer without it. Also, 'in a long line' is correct preposition usage.

× When I do something from a long time, sometimes it's uh, irritates me and frustrates me.

✓ When I do something for a long time, sometimes it irritates me and frustrates me.

The correct preposition is 'for' not 'from' when indicating duration. Also, 'it's irritates me' is incorrect; it should be 'it irritates me' without 's' after 'it's'.

× And moreover, uh, when I have to do uh, something, uh, like on a regular basis, uh, these things make me irritated as well as I'm not feel good.

✓ Moreover, when I have to do something on a regular basis, these things make me irritated and I do not feel good.

The phrase 'I'm not feel good' is incorrect; it should be 'I do not feel good'. Also, 'make me irritated' is acceptable but 'make me feel irritated' would be better; however, correction kept minimal as per instructions.

× So at that time we always handle to the customers in a polite and calm way.

✓ So at that time we always handle the customers in a polite and calm way.

The verb 'handle' does not require the preposition 'to' when referring to customers; 'handle the customers' is correct.

× So my job is the very important thing in my job to be patient.

✓ So being patient is a very important part of my job.

The original sentence is awkward and incorrect. 'The very important thing in my job to be patient' is not proper English. The correction clarifies the meaning and uses correct adjective placement.

× When I was kid, I am I was not too much calm.

✓ When I was a kid, I was not very calm.

The phrase 'I was kid' is missing the article 'a'. Also, 'too much calm' is incorrect; 'very calm' is the correct adjective usage.

× I did not know the reality and the benefits of to stay calm.

✓ I did not know the reality and the benefits of staying calm.

After 'benefits of', the gerund form 'staying' should be used, not the infinitive 'to stay'.

× Nowadays I'm brushing up my this skill and I can easily handle my emotions during each and every situations.

✓ Nowadays I'm brushing up this skill and I can easily handle my emotions during each and every situation.

The phrase 'my this skill' is incorrect; it should be 'this skill'. Also, 'each and every situations' is incorrect because 'each and every' requires singular noun 'situation'.

× When I was kid, whenever I have to go to school and whenever I have to do some little tasks, I easily get frustrated and I usually lose my patience.

✓ When I was a kid, whenever I had to go to school and whenever I had to do some little tasks, I easily got frustrated and I usually lost my patience.

The phrase 'When I was kid' needs the article 'a'. Also, the tense should be past ('had to', 'got frustrated', 'lost') to match 'When I was a kid'.