Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 직접적이지만, 문장이 다소 길고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 좀 더 명확하고 간결하게 답변하며, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can easily wait in lines at restaurants or cafes without feeling frustrated.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 표현이 어색합니다. 특히 'makes me really hard to be impatient' 부분은 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 명확하게 고치고, 구체적인 이유를 자연스럽게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I feel impatient when I am waiting for a delivery, such as new clothes I ordered, because I get very excited and find it hard to wait.

提案: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'before I have to do' 부분이 어색하며, 연결어를 사용해 생각을 더 명확히 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I usually feel exhausted when I have to do something for a long time because it is difficult for me to maintain concentration.

提案: 답변에 중복 표현과 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'most of the most of the jobs'는 부자연스럽고, 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Although I don't have a job now, I believe most jobs require patience because they involve many steps and deadlines.

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 직접적이지만, 마지막 문장의 문법과 표현이 어색합니다. 'that I cannot even wait' 대신 'and I couldn't even wait'와 같은 표현을 사용해 보세요.

例: Yes, definitely. I am more patient now than when I was a child because I couldn't even wait for a second to eat candy back then.

× I feel impatient when I delivered something to my house.

✓ I feel impatient when I have delivered something to my house.

'Delivered' is the simple past tense, but the sentence requires the present perfect tense to indicate a recent action affecting the present. Use 'have delivered' instead of 'delivered'.

× if I ordered some of my new clothes, it makes me really hard to be impatient because I'm too excited to wait them.

✓ if I ordered some of my new clothes, it makes it really hard for me to be patient because I'm too excited to wait for them.

The pronoun 'it' is missing before 'really hard', and 'to be impatient' contradicts the intended meaning; it should be 'to be patient'. Also, 'wait them' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'wait for them'.

× the most thing I feel is that it makes me exhausted before I have to do something for a long time because it is hard for me to keep concentrated on something.

✓ the main thing I feel is that it makes me exhausted before I have to do something for a long time because it is hard for me to stay concentrated on something.

'The most thing' is incorrect; 'the main thing' or 'the most important thing' is appropriate. Also, 'keep concentrated' should be 'stay concentrated' or 'keep concentrating'.

× I think most of the most of the jobs would require me to be patient.

✓ I think most of the jobs would require me to be patient.

The phrase 'most of the most of the jobs' is redundant and incorrect. It should be 'most of the jobs'.

× There are lots of steps I need to finish and have a deadline on it, so it might require patience.

✓ There are lots of steps I need to finish and have a deadline for, so it might require patience.

The correct preposition with 'deadline' is 'for', not 'on'.

× When I was a child, I was a really impatient person that I cannot even wait for a second because I want to eat a candy.

✓ When I was a child, I was a really impatient person who could not even wait for a second because I wanted to eat a candy.

Use 'who' instead of 'that' when referring to a person. Also, tense consistency requires 'could not' and 'wanted' instead of 'cannot' and 'want'.