Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不够准确，句子结构较为混乱。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和介词，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. When I face difficulties, I take extra time to focus carefully, which helps me avoid mistakes.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，建议使用更准确的时间表达和连接词，使句子更连贯。

例: I feel impatient when I don't have enough time to do small tasks. For example, if I have to wait for my friends but the movie starts in ten minutes and I have a class to attend, I get anxious.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议使用简单明了的句子，表达自己的感受和原因，并使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I remind myself to stay focused. Otherwise, I might rush and make mistakes, which could lead to bad results.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，建议使用更准确的词汇和句型，避免口语化表达，使回答更正式和连贯。

例: Yes, patience is an important quality in my field. Since I study financial management, I need to carefully review financial reports to avoid mistakes in calculations.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议完整表达观点，使用正确的时态和词汇，避免句子残缺。

例: I was very impatient when I was a child, which caused me to make mistakes. However, I have learned from those experiences and become more patient now.

× I used to pay more time when I face some trouble and I think pay more attention can avoid something goes wrong at that time.

✓ I used to spend more time when I face some troubles and I think paying more attention can avoid something going wrong at that time.

这里的“some trouble”应改为复数形式“some troubles”，因为指的是多种麻烦；“pay more time”应改为“spend more time”，更符合英语表达习惯；“pay more attention”作为动名词短语应使用“paying more attention”；“something goes wrong”中“something”后动词应使用动名词形式“going”以符合句意。

× So it is a very important thing to pay attention on this.

✓ So it is a very important thing to pay attention to this.

动词短语“pay attention”后应接介词“to”，而不是“on”。

× When I haven't some enough time to do the little things, for instance I must wait for my friends, but the movie will start in 10 minute and I have to join in a class by this meeting.

✓ When I don't have enough time to do the little things, for instance I must wait for my friends, but the movie will start in 10 minutes and I have to join a class by this meeting.

“haven't some enough time”结构错误，应改为“don't have enough time”；“10 minute”应为复数“10 minutes”；“join in a class”中“join”后不需要介词“in”，应直接用“join a class”。

× I will tell myself about you have to pay more attention to it.

✓ I will tell myself that you have to pay more attention to it.

“tell”后应接宾语从句，缺少连词“that”，使句子完整。

× If you don't, you can't finish this task or something I have to do and maybe I rushed, I rushed to finish it.

✓ If you don't, you can't finish this task or something I have to do and maybe I rush, I rush to finish it.

句中“rushed”时态不符合上下文，应使用一般现在时“rush”，表示习惯性动作。

× Yes, to be patient is very excellent trait in my major.

✓ Yes, to be patient is a very excellent trait in my major.

“trait”前应加不定冠词“a”，表示单数可数名词。

× I must pay more attention on the financial report 'cause if I calculate by my mistake through.

✓ I must pay more attention to the financial report because if I make a mistake in calculation, it will cause problems.

“pay attention”后应接介词“to”；“'cause”应写为“because”更正式；“calculate by my mistake through”表达不清，应改为“make a mistake in calculation”。

× I was a very impatient girl when I was young and I got some bad errors after that, so I think I'm developed from that experience.

✓ I was a very impatient girl when I was young and I made some bad mistakes after that, so I think I have developed from that experience.

“got some bad errors”表达不自然，应改为“made some bad mistakes”；“I'm developed”时态错误，应改为现在完成时“have developed”，表示从过去到现在的变化。

× For example, maybe because of the patients I.

✓ For example, maybe because of my patience.

“patients”是“病人”的意思，错误使用，应改为“patience”，表示“耐心”。