Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but a bit redundant and lacks coherence. Try to make your response more concise and structured by starting with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explaining why. Avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to improve flow.

例: No, I'm not a patient person because I tend to rush through tasks due to anxiety about time. This makes me do things quickly rather than waiting or taking my time.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid filler words like 'umm'.

例: I feel impatient when others work slowly because I prefer to finish my tasks quickly. For example, when studying or working, I like to maintain a fast pace to stay focused.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Make sure to directly answer the question with a clear statement about your feelings, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid incomplete sentences and organize your ideas logically using linking words.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I try to remind myself of its importance to stay motivated. For instance, while working, I focus solely on the task because I know it requires my full attention.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why your job requires patience with specific examples. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, my job as a pharmacist requires a great deal of patience because I interact with many patients. Therefore, I make an effort to remain calm and attentive to provide the best care possible.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more concise. Begin with a direct statement, then support it with specific details or examples. Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Over the past ten years, I have learned to control my impatience, especially through my work and life experiences.

× I have some source of anxiety which I think that I have to do everything fast.

✓ I have some sources of anxiety which I think that I have to do everything fast.

The word 'source' should be plural 'sources' because it refers to multiple causes of anxiety, not just one.

× I am a type of person which I'm doing my work, my study, anything related to me, I do them so fast that umm.

✓ I am the type of person who does my work, my study, anything related to me, very fast.

The relative pronoun 'which' is incorrect for people; 'who' should be used. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs correction for clarity and subject-verb agreement.

× I can say that no, I'm not a patient person at all as I'm always in hurry and doing my stuff and work rapidly.

✓ I can say that no, I'm not a patient person at all as I'm always in a hurry and doing my stuff and work rapidly.

The phrase 'in hurry' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in a hurry' because 'hurry' is a countable noun here and requires an article.

× And being a pharmacist and interacting with the patient usually requires a lot of patient and I actually try to practice that a lot while I'm at work because my work is my priority and I try to do my best so.

✓ And being a pharmacist and interacting with patients usually requires a lot of patience and I actually try to practice that a lot while I'm at work because my work is my priority and I try to do my best.

The word 'patient' is incorrectly used instead of 'patience', which is the correct noun form to express the quality needed.

× I think that I am practicing patience nowadays and I'm more patient now as compared as before or when I was a child.

✓ I think that I am practicing patience nowadays and I'm more patient now compared to before or when I was a child.

The phrase 'as compared as' is incorrect; the correct comparative phrase is 'compared to'.