Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như 'painting person' thay vì 'patient person', 'sing carefully before writing' không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn, tránh lỗi phát âm và ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I try to stay calm in difficult situations. For example, when things don't go as planned, I usually remain composed and think carefully before reacting. However, sometimes I do lose my temper if I feel very stressed.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý phát âm và sử dụng từ đúng như 'impatient' thay vì 'in painting', 'things don't go as wind' nên là 'things don't go as planned'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

例: I feel impatient when things don't go as planned and I lose control over the situation. For example, if I have to wait for a long time or when tasks become overwhelming, I start to feel frustrated and stressed. This often makes me lose my calm.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, câu không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I usually feel stressed and frustrated when I have to do something for a long time because it can be tiring. For example, when I have to wait for my friend to get ready before going shopping or hanging out, I start to feel bored and think it's a waste of time.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi. Câu trả lời hiện tại không rõ nghĩa và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, đúng ngữ pháp và từ vựng phù hợp để trả lời câu hỏi một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: Currently, I am a student, so I don't have a job that requires patience. However, I often need to be patient when dealing with friends, especially when they make me feel angry or upset.

提案: Bạn cần sử dụng từ vựng chính xác như 'patience' thay vì 'pension'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, có cấu trúc tốt hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để thể hiện ý tưởng một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I practice patience every day because I know it plays an important role in life, my future, and my career. Therefore, I am trying to improve it continuously.

× I consider myself a painting person most of the time because I try to remain calm in different situation.

✓ I consider myself a patient person most of the time because I try to remain calm in different situations.

The word 'painting' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'patient'. Also, 'situation' should be plural 'situations' to match the context of multiple instances.

× when things don't go as splendid, I usually stay composed and sing carefully before writing.

✓ when things don't go as splendidly, I usually stay composed and sing carefully before writing.

The adverb form 'splendidly' should be used instead of the adjective 'splendid' to modify the verb phrase 'go as'.

× However, sometime I do lose my temper if I feel.

✓ However, sometimes I do lose my temper if I feel frustrated.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'frustrated' clarifies the condition.

× Wells what made me feel in painting is when things don't go as wind and I lose control over the situation.

✓ Well, what makes me feel impatient is when things don't go as planned and I lose control over the situation.

'Wells' should be 'Well'. 'In painting' is incorrect; it should be 'impatient'. 'Don't go as wind' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'don't go as planned'.

× This often make me lose my Cam.

✓ This often makes me lose my calm.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'This'. 'Cam' is a typo and should be 'calm'.

× I usually feel quite stressed and frustrated when I have to do something for a long time because it may feel impatient.

✓ I usually feel quite stressed and frustrated when I have to do something for a long time because it may make me feel impatient.

The phrase 'it may feel impatient' is incorrect; it should be 'it may make me feel impatient' to express cause and effect.

× For example when I have to wait for my friend to get remedy before going for shopping, so or hanging out I start feeling some noise and waste my time.

✓ For example, when I have to wait for my friend to get ready before going shopping or hanging out, I start feeling annoyed and like I'm wasting my time.

The sentence has structural issues and unclear phrases. 'Get remedy' should be 'get ready'. 'So or hanging out' is incorrect; it should be 'or hanging out'. 'Feeling some noise' is unclear; 'feeling annoyed' is more appropriate.

× Well honestly right now I'm just a student so the most thing that buying me is starting.

✓ Well, honestly, right now I'm just a student, so the most challenging thing for me is being patient.

The phrase 'the most thing that buying me is starting' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'the most challenging thing for me is being patient' to convey the intended meaning.

× For example, I need to come camped out in some situation with my friend when she puts my angry mood.

✓ For example, I need to stay calm in some situations with my friend when she puts me in an angry mood.

'Come camped out' is incorrect; 'stay calm' is appropriate. 'Puts my angry mood' should be 'puts me in an angry mood' to use correct prepositions and pronouns.

× Yes, of course, day by day I am practice to improve my pension because I know that pension is played is plays an important roles in our life, in our future and in our job.

✓ Yes, of course, day by day I am practicing to improve my patience because I know that patience plays an important role in our life, our future, and our job.

'I am practice' should be 'I am practicing'. 'Pension' is incorrect; it should be 'patience'. 'Is played is plays' is redundant; 'plays' is correct. 'Roles' should be singular 'role' to match the context.