Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、言い回しが不自然で冗長な部分があります。例えば、「umm」や「for, for」などの繰り返しを避け、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。また、具体的な例をもう少し明確に述べると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because, as a journalist, I often have to wait for interviews to start and listen carefully to the interviewee. This experience has helped me develop patience over time.

提案: 内容が少し分かりにくく、語彙の選択も適切ではありません。例えば、「feeding me impatient」は誤用で、「makes me feel impatient」が正しいです。また、具体的な理由や状況を明確に説明することが必要です。

例: I feel impatient when people distract me, especially colleagues who interrupt my work. Therefore, I prefer to spend most of my working time focused alone to avoid distractions.

提案: 表現が不自然で意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。例えば、「I'm very nobody sender」は意味不明です。文法と語彙の正確さを改善し、リラックスの重要性について具体的に説明すると良いでしょう。

例: I don't enjoy doing the same task for a long time, but I believe that learning to relax during breaks is an essential skill, especially for journalists who often face stressful situations.

提案: 回答は直接的で内容も理解できますが、文法の誤りや単語の使い方に注意が必要です。例えば、「needs」は単数形ですが、複数の「meetings」には「need」が正しいです。より自然な表現を心がけましょう。

例: Yes, my job definitely requires patience because I often have to wait two or three hours to meet someone. For example, important meetings can take a long time to arrange.

提案: 回答が曖昧で、言いたいことがはっきり伝わりません。言葉の繰り返しを減らし、具体的にどのように忍耐力が向上したのか説明すると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Recently, I have learned to handle complaints from colleagues and business partners calmly, which was difficult for me before.

× I'm very used to spending a lot of time, umm, for, for waiting as someone to do the interview and listen his voice.

✓ I'm very used to spending a lot of time waiting for someone to do the interview and listen to his voice.

The phrase 'for waiting' is incorrect; after 'used to', the verb should be in the '-ing' form without 'for'. Also, 'listen his voice' should be 'listen to his voice' because 'listen' requires the preposition 'to'.

× I think one of the important things about feeding me impatient is someone who disattracts me.

✓ I think one of the important things that makes me impatient is someone who distracts me.

The phrase 'feeding me impatient' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'makes me impatient'. Also, 'disattracts' is a wrong word; the correct verb is 'distracts'.

× I don't like to spend a lot of time with my colleague.

✓ I don't like to spend a lot of time with my colleagues.

If referring to more than one colleague, the plural form 'colleagues' should be used. If only one colleague is meant, the sentence is correct, but context suggests plural is intended.

× I feel I'm very nobody sender, I don't like to spend a lot of time for a long time, but I think spending time with relaxing is a very important, inevitable and essential skill for the especially journalists.

✓ I feel I'm very impatient; I don't like to spend a lot of time for a long time, but I think spending time relaxing is a very important, inevitable, and essential skill especially for journalists.

The phrase 'nobody sender' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'impatient'. 'Spending time with relaxing' should be 'spending time relaxing' without 'with'. Also, 'for the especially journalists' should be 'especially for journalists'.

× some important meetings needs a lot of time.

✓ some important meetings need a lot of time.

The subject 'meetings' is plural, so the verb should be 'need' without 's'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to modal verb usage.

× I'm very used to seeing some complaints for my colleagues and business partners.

✓ I'm very used to hearing some complaints from my colleagues and business partners.

The verb 'complaints' is usually followed by the preposition 'from' to indicate the source, not 'for'. Also, 'seeing complaints' is unusual; 'hearing complaints' is more appropriate.