Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不够准确，且句子较长且有些重复。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和词形变化，使表达更自然流畅。

例: No, I am not very patient, especially when I am worried about my work. For example, I often feel stressed and find it hard to focus as deadlines approach.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但句子结构稍显复杂且有语法错误。建议使用更简洁的句子，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Anxiety makes me feel impatient. For instance, when a deadline is near and I feel I can't control the situation, I become eager to finish my work quickly.

提案: 回答不完整且有语法错误，内容偏离主题。建议避免提及未经证实的健康状况，保持回答简洁且相关。

例: I usually feel tired and restless when I have to do something for a long time. Therefore, I try to take short breaks to stay focused and patient.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清的问题，且部分内容重复。建议简化表达，明确说明考试中需要耐心的原因。

例: Yes, as a student, I need to be patient, especially during exams. Sometimes I feel nervous, but I remind myself to stay calm and focused.

提案: 回答表达了对比，但句子不完整且用词不当。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达过去和现在的对比。

例: Definitely, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Before, I used to get frustrated with difficult tests, but now I try to stay calm and work through them patiently.

× No, actually I am not patient at many aspects in my life, such as I always worried about my work and I can't come down and do the work smoothly when the deadline is coming.

✓ No, actually I am not patient in many aspects of my life, such as I always worry about my work and I can't calm down and do the work smoothly when the deadline is coming.

这里“at many aspects”应改为“in many aspects of”，表示在生活的许多方面；“worried”应改为现在时“worry”，因为描述的是习惯性动作；“come down”应为“calm down”，表示冷静下来。

× No, actually I am not patient at many aspects in my life, such as I always worried about my work and I can't come down and do the work smoothly when the deadline is coming.

✓ No, actually I am not patient in many aspects of my life, such as I always worry about my work and I can't calm down and do the work smoothly when the deadline is coming.

“worried”是过去式，但句子描述的是习惯性行为，应使用一般现在时“worry”。

× No, actually I am not patient at many aspects in my life, such as I always worried about my work and I can't come down and do the work smoothly when the deadline is coming.

✓ No, actually I am not patient in many aspects of my life, such as I always worry about my work and I can't calm down and do the work smoothly when the deadline is coming.

“patient”后面应接介词“in”表示“在……方面”，而非“at”；“aspects”后应加“of”表示“……的方面”。

× I think it is anxiety that makes me feel impatient. When I feel that I can't control something, such as the time is near the deadline, I will feel very impatient to finish this work because I know I have the risk to lose control.

✓ I think it is anxiety that makes me feel impatient. When I feel that I can't control something, such as when the time is near the deadline, I feel very impatient to finish this work because I know I risk losing control.

“such as the time is near the deadline”应改为“such as when the time is near the deadline”，使句子更通顺；“I will feel”改为一般现在时“I feel”，因为描述的是习惯性反应；“I have the risk to lose control”应改为“I risk losing control”，更符合英语表达习惯。

× Yes, as a student I have to be patient on my walks or especially on in my during my exam.

✓ Yes, as a student I have to be patient in my work, especially during my exams.

“patient”后应接介词“in”而非“on”；“walks”应为“work”更符合语境；“on in my during my exam”结构混乱，应简化为“especially during my exams”。

× But I will tell myself to come.

✓ But I will tell myself to calm down.

“tell myself to come”表达不清，应为“tell myself to calm down”，意思是告诉自己冷静下来。

× Actually I think I may have ADHD because I can't focus to do something very well. I will always feel impatient and.

✓ Actually, I think I may have ADHD because I can't focus on doing something very well. I always feel impatient.

“focus to do”应改为“focus on doing”，符合动词搭配；句子末尾“and.”不完整，应去掉“and”使句子完整。