Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then support it with specific examples. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: I consider myself a patient person in most situations, especially when dealing with others. However, I sometimes lose patience when people around me are impatient or rude.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific reasons.

例: I feel impatient mostly when I encounter lazy people because they depend on others to solve their problems, which can be frustrating and unfair.

提案: Use more precise vocabulary and avoid vague phrases like 'same daily stuffs'. Also, connect ideas logically with linking words.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I feel that it creates a routine, which helps me improve my skills and contributes positively to my future.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, improve grammar and sentence flow.

例: Currently, I don't have a job, but my university studies require me to be patient with my tasks and schedules to succeed in my major.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I better understand my parents' advice and the reasons behind their guidance.

× sometimes I'm fully patient person but the other times I'm not

✓ sometimes I'm a fully patient person but other times I'm not

The phrase 'patient person' requires an article 'a' before it because it is a singular countable noun. Also, 'the other times' should be 'other times' for natural usage.

× when a lot of people are not patient and I'm the person patient one

✓ when a lot of people are not patient and I'm the patient one

The phrase 'the person patient one' is incorrect; it should be 'the patient one' to correctly use the noun phrase.

× on the other situation I'm not

✓ in the other situation I'm not

The correct preposition to use with 'situation' is 'in' rather than 'on'.

× lazy people mostly makes me feel impatient

✓ lazy people mostly make me feel impatient

The subject 'lazy people' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes' to agree in number.

× they want to other people fix their situations

✓ they want other people to fix their situations

The phrase 'want to other people fix' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'want other people to fix'.

× and about their themselves and their lives

✓ and about themselves and their lives

The phrase 'about their themselves' is incorrect; 'themselves' is a reflexive pronoun and does not need 'their' before it.

× doing same daily stuffs and makes you improve your life and your future

✓ doing the same daily stuff and it makes you improve your life and your future

'stuffs' is incorrect; 'stuff' is uncountable and should not be pluralized. Also, 'doing same daily stuff' needs 'the' before 'same'. The verb 'makes' needs a subject, so 'it' is added.

× I have to be patient about my task and my schedules

✓ I have to be patient with my tasks and my schedule

The correct preposition with 'patient' is 'with'. Also, 'task' and 'schedules' should be plural and singular respectively for natural usage.

× so I can be more useful about for my major

✓ so I can be more useful for my major

The phrase 'about for' is incorrect; only 'for' is needed here.

× because that time I was too kid to understand some things

✓ because at that time I was too young to understand some things

'too kid' is incorrect; 'kid' is a noun, and the adjective 'young' should be used. Also, 'at that time' is the correct phrase.

× But now when I grow up I understand them without telling me something

✓ But now that I have grown up, I understand them without them telling me anything

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'When I grow up' should be 'that I have grown up' to indicate past completion. Also, 'without telling me something' should specify who is telling, so 'without them telling me anything' is correct.