Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和用词有些错误，且表达不够自然。建议注意动词形式和冠词的使用，避免重复表达。可以用更地道的表达方式来描述耐心。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can concentrate on tasks for extended periods. For instance, at work, I handle complex issues calmly without getting frustrated. Additionally, I am patient when taking care of my children.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Although I am generally patient, I feel impatient in certain situations, especially when I am very busy and have to wait a long time, such as when shopping or visiting the doctor.

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法和词汇使用错误较多。建议先明确表达观点，再用具体例子支持，避免重复和不连贯。

例: When I have to work on something for a long time, especially if it interests me or is related to my job, I feel comfortable because I believe the effort is worthwhile.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不准确的问题。建议注意动词形式和词汇选择，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I am a material planner. My main responsibility is to control the store inventory, which demands careful and continuous monitoring day by day.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达不完整的问题。建议使用完整句子，避免重复，清晰表达因果关系。

例: Definitely, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have grown older and taken on more responsibilities, such as being a mother and a worker, which require me to be more patient.

× For example, on the work, I can spend more time deal with complex things without any impatient.

✓ For example, at work, I can spend more time dealing with complex things without any impatience.

介词使用错误，'on the work' 应改为 'at work'，表示在工作场所；'spend more time deal' 应为 'spend more time dealing'，动词后应接动名词形式；'impatient' 是形容词，需用名词 'impatience'。

× For example, on the work, I can spend more time deal with complex things without any impatient.

✓ For example, at work, I can spend more time dealing with complex things without any impatience.

'impatient' 是形容词，句中需用名词形式 'impatience' 来表达“没有不耐烦”。

× Actually I'm a patient person, but in some more special occasions, especially when I am very busy, but I have to wait a long time for shopping or meet the doctor, which can make me feel impatient.

✓ Actually, I'm a patient person, but on some special occasions, especially when I am very busy, I have to wait a long time for shopping or to see the doctor, which can make me feel impatient.

句中重复使用了两个 'but'，应去掉其中一个；'in some more special occasions' 应为 'on some special occasions'，介词错误；'meet the doctor' 应改为 'to see the doctor'，表达更自然。

× For example, on the work, I can spend more time deal with complex things without any impatient.

✓ For example, at work, I can spend more time dealing with complex things without any impatience.

动词 'spend' 后应接动名词形式 'dealing'，而非动词原形 'deal'。

× Actually I'm a patient person, but in some more special occasions, especially when I am very busy, but I have to wait a long time for shopping or meet the doctor, which can make me feel impatient.

✓ Actually, I'm a patient person, but on some special occasions, especially when I am very busy, I have to wait a long time for shopping or to see the doctor, which can make me feel impatient.

介词 'in' 用于时间或地点不当，应改为 'on'；'for shopping' 表达可接受，但 'meet the doctor' 应改为 'to see the doctor' 更自然。

× Follow some interesting things or for work, work working tasks.

✓ Following some interesting things or work tasks.

'Follow' 应用动名词形式 'Following'；'work working tasks' 结构重复，应简化为 'work tasks'。

× My job is require my to be patient because I'm a material planner.

✓ My job requires me to be patient because I'm a material planner.

'require' 动词需用第三人称单数形式 'requires'；'my' 应为宾格 'me'。

× My job is require my to be patient because I'm a material planner.

✓ My job requires me to be patient because I'm a material planner.

主语 'My job' 是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加 's'，即 'requires'。

× My mainly responsibility is control the store inventory.

✓ My main responsibility is to control the store inventory.

'mainly' 是副词，应改为形容词 'main'；'is control' 应为 'is to control'，不定式作表语。

× This is a very high demand for patients to calculate the inventory time time to time, day, day by day.

✓ This requires a lot of patience to calculate the inventory time to time, day by day.

'demand for patients' 用词不当，应改为 'requires a lot of patience'；'time time to time' 重复，应为 'time to time'；'day, day by day' 应为 'day by day'。

× This is a very high demand for patients to calculate the inventory time time to time, day, day by day.

✓ This requires a lot of patience to calculate the inventory time to time, day by day.

表达耐心时应使用 'a lot of patience'，而非 'a very high demand for patients'。

× Constantly. I am more patient now than when I was a child because I get older.

✓ Certainly, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have gotten older.

'Constantly' 用词不当，应为 'Certainly'；'get older' 过去完成时应为 'have gotten older'。

× Constantly. I am more patient now than when I was a child because I get older.

✓ Certainly, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have gotten older.

表示从过去到现在的变化，需用现在完成时 'have gotten older'。

× I have more responsibility in my daily life, such as as a mother, as a worker at a workplace.

✓ I have more responsibility in my daily life, such as being a mother and a worker at a workplace.

'such as' 后应接名词或动名词短语，'as a mother' 改为 'being a mother' 更自然；重复 'as' 应去掉。

× I need to be more patient to deal with more.

✓ I need to be more patient to deal with more things.

句子不完整，'deal with more' 后应加宾语，如 'things'，使句子完整。