Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，且内容重复。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用具体细节支持。

例: When I was a child, I was quite impatient and often upset others. However, after my parents advised me to be more patient, I have improved a lot and now I am much calmer.

提案: 表达不够清晰，句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议用更简洁的句子表达原因，并使用连接词使逻辑更连贯。

例: I feel impatient when I have to explain something several times because I believe it should be easy to understand. This makes me frustrated.

提案: 回答较为自然，但有语法错误和用词不当。建议注意单复数和冠词的使用，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I don't usually feel impatient when doing something for a long time because I enjoy spending time alone. Therefore, I prefer a quiet environment to focus and relax.

提案: 回答中有重复和表达不准确的问题。建议避免重复，使用更准确的词汇，并简洁明了地表达观点。

例: Yes, my future job as a director requires a lot of patience because I need to manage the team and handle many challenges calmly.

提案: 回答内容重复且语法错误较多。建议用更简洁的句子表达对比，并注意时态和主谓一致。

例: Yes, I am definitely more patient now. As a child, I was impatient and had few friends, but after my parents' advice, I learned to be more patient and made many friends.

× Well, actually in the past July was just a six year old child.

✓ Well, actually, in the past, I was just a six-year-old child.

句子缺少主语“I”，且“six year old”应连写为“six-year-old”，表示复合形容词。

× I was not a patient person that I hurt a lot of people.

✓ I was not a patient person, so I hurt a lot of people.

原句中“that”连接不当，应使用“so”表示因果关系。

× I felt so sad that nobody want to be friend with me.

✓ I felt so sad that nobody wanted to be friends with me.

“nobody”是单数，谓语动词应使用过去式“wanted”；“be friend”应改为“be friends”，表示成为朋友。

× I asked my parents and they told me I should be more patient.

✓ I asked my parents, and they told me I should be more patient.

句子中缺少逗号，连接两个独立分句时应使用逗号加连词。

× These days I've become more.

✓ These days, I've become more patient.

句子不完整，缺少形容词“patient”来说明“more”的内容。

× if I told someone something and they couldn't understand my meanings for a long time, I have to repeat my words again and again.

✓ if I tell someone something and they can't understand my meaning for a long time, I have to repeat my words again and again.

时态应保持一致，条件句用一般现在时；“meanings”应为不可数名词“meaning”。

× I will feel impatient because I think it's easy to understand what they can't, so I couldn't understand it.

✓ I will feel impatient because I think it's easy to understand, but they can't, so I can't understand it.

句子逻辑混乱，代词指代不清，需调整表达使意思明确。

× Well actually I don't think it'll make me impatient because as a reserved person I really enjoy doing somethings by myself.

✓ Well, actually, I don't think it'll make me impatient because as a reserved person I really enjoy doing things by myself.

“somethings”错误，应为不可数名词“things”。

× So if I have to do something for a long time, I will let myself alone and stay in a quiet atmosphere to enjoy this.

✓ So if I have to do something for a long time, I will leave myself alone and stay in a quiet atmosphere to enjoy it.

“let myself alone”用法错误，应为“leave myself alone”；“enjoy this”应改为“enjoy it”。

× Yes, of course, as I said, my major is called drama, cinema, television and literature.

✓ Yes, of course, as I said, my major is drama, cinema, television, and literature.

“is called”用法不当，专业名称直接用“is”连接即可。

× As you know, the director is a big parent of the whole team and we must be both patient and patient, so it is very required.

✓ As you know, the director is like a big parent of the whole team, and we must be very patient, so it is very important.

“both patient and patient”重复，应改为“very patient”；“very required”用法错误，应为“very important”。

× Yes, of course, when I was a child I was so impatient that nobody want to become friend with me.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was a child I was so impatient that nobody wanted to become friends with me.

“nobody”是单数，谓语动词应使用过去式“wanted”；“become friend”应为“become friends”。

× So I was lonely and I can't find the solution.

✓ So I was lonely and I couldn't find the solution.

时态不一致，前半句为过去时，后半句应保持过去时态。

× But I asked my parents and they told me I should be more patient.

✓ But I asked my parents, and they told me I should be more patient.

连接两个独立分句时应使用逗号加连词。

× So when I grow up I become a patient person.

✓ So when I grew up, I became a patient person.

描述过去的动作，时态应使用过去式“grew”和“became”。