Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và rõ ràng, nhưng bạn nên sử dụng thêm các từ nối để làm cho câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể thêm một câu kết luận để làm câu trả lời hoàn chỉnh hơn.

例: Actually, I am not a very patient person because I have a short temper and I get frustrated easily. For example, I don't like waiting for other people because it makes me feel anxious and restless. Therefore, I usually try to avoid situations where I have to wait for a long time. Overall, I am working on improving my patience.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ như câu 'it waste my time' nên là 'it wastes my time'. Thêm vào đó, bạn có thể sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và mở rộng thêm ý để câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for other people because it makes me feel tired and uncomfortable. For instance, when someone is late for a meeting, I start to get frustrated since it wastes my time and disrupts my plans. Consequently, I try to be punctual myself to avoid such situations.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt, tự nhiên và có ví dụ cụ thể. Tuy nhiên, bạn có thể thêm từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như 'feel'.

例: To be honest, I feel very uncomfortable when I have to do something for a long time because it makes me tired and bored. For example, when I have to study for several hours without a break, I find it hard to concentrate and stay motivated. Therefore, I usually take short breaks to refresh myself.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến số nhiều trong câu 'difficult task' nên là 'difficult tasks'. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và thêm một câu kết luận để làm câu trả lời hoàn chỉnh.

例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I often have to focus on difficult tasks for long periods. Sometimes, it can be challenging to stay concentrated, especially when the work is repetitive. However, being patient helps me complete my tasks effectively and maintain high quality.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rất tốt, có cấu trúc rõ ràng và nội dung cụ thể. Bạn có thể thêm một câu kết luận để làm câu trả lời hoàn chỉnh hơn và sử dụng từ nối để tăng tính mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. When I was young, my parents did everything for me, so I didn't have to worry about much. However, as an adult, I have to manage many responsibilities on my own, which has taught me to be more patient and understanding in different situations. Overall, this growth has helped me handle challenges better.

× I start to get frustrated since it waste my time and disrupt my plans.

✓ I start to get frustrated since it wastes my time and disrupts my plans.

The verbs 'waste' and 'disrupt' should be in the third person singular present tense to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The correct forms are 'wastes' and 'disrupts'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to verb tense.

× my job requires a lot of patience because I often have to focus on difficult task for long periods.

✓ my job requires a lot of patience because I often have to focus on difficult tasks for long periods.

The noun 'task' should be plural 'tasks' because it refers to multiple instances or types of work. Using the plural form matches the context of 'long periods' and general work duties.

× But being patient helps me complete my task effectively.

✓ But being patient helps me complete my tasks effectively.

Similar to the previous correction, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to indicate multiple tasks rather than a single one, which fits the context of ongoing work.