Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然且内容相关，但句子结构有些混乱，表达不够简洁。建议注意句子连贯性，避免冗余，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person, especially in my role as a team leader. When new members join, I carefully guide them through our work directions and tasks. Over time, they have expressed appreciation for my patience and dedication.

提案: 回答内容具体且相关，但表达略显口语化，建议使用更正式的表达方式，并适当使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I feel impatient when I receive numerous messages about work issues simultaneously. Additionally, it annoys me when I remind team members to focus on specific points, but they keep forgetting them.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，建议加强语法准确性，使用更清晰的表达，并合理使用连接词。

例: When I have to work on a long task, I first acknowledge the challenge it presents. Then, I break it into smaller sub-tasks and focus on the key elements that have the greatest impact on the results.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不准确，建议注意句子结构，避免语法错误，并使用更准确的词汇表达。

例: Yes, I am a product manager, and patience is essential in my job. I need to pay attention to small details, such as the size of icons and the placement of text. Moreover, I have to transform users' uncertain demands into real functions.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法和用词错误，建议加强语法准确性，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意词汇的正确使用。

例: Definitely, I am much more patient now than when I was a child. Back then, I was full of energy and couldn't sit still for long. However, over time, with the guidance of my parents and teachers, I learned that patience and concentration are essential in life.

× When there are new comings, I always get them carefully letting them know about our work direction and tasks.

✓ When there are newcomers, I always get them carefully, letting them know about our work direction and tasks.

“new comings”不是正确的复数形式，正确的词是“newcomers”，表示新来的人。

× Gradually they told me that they are truly appreciated for my patience and sense of duty.

✓ Gradually they told me that they truly appreciated my patience and sense of duty.

“are truly appreciated”时态和语态不正确，应该用过去时“appreciated”来表达他们过去对我的感激。

× I lost patience when lots of people bombarded me with messages about work issues at the same time.

✓ I lose patience when lots of people bombard me with messages about work issues at the same time.

根据上下文，这里描述的是一般情况，应该用一般现在时而非过去时。

× And another thing is when I tell our team members to focus on specific points but they keep forgetting which can really annoy me.

✓ Another thing is when I tell our team members to focus on specific points but they keep forgetting, which can really annoy me.

句子结构中缺少逗号，导致句意不清，添加逗号使句子更通顺。

× When faced with a long time task, I first acknowledged the challenge it praises.

✓ When faced with a long task, I first acknowledge the challenge it presents.

“acknowledged”用过去时不合适，描述习惯动作应使用一般现在时；“praises”用词错误，应为“presents”表示“带来”。

× I usually break it into some sub tasks and concentrate on the K elements which have the most significant impact on results and then deal with them.

✓ I usually break it into some subtasks and concentrate on the key elements which have the most significant impact on results and then deal with them.

“sub tasks”应写作一个词“subtasks”；“K elements”应为“key elements”，拼写错误。

× Yes, I saw product manager.

✓ Yes, I am a product manager.

“saw”是过去时，语境中应使用现在时“am”；且缺少冠词“a”。

× I must focus on some small details like how big is the icons are and where to put texts.

✓ I must focus on some small details like how big the icons are and where to put texts.

“how big is the icons are”语序错误，应为“how big the icons are”。

× And also I need to turn users uncertain demands into real functions.

✓ And also I need to turn users' uncertain demands into real functions.

“users uncertain demands”缺少所有格，应为“users' uncertain demands”。

× Definitely, I'm way more patient now than when I was a kid.

✓ Definitely, I'm much more patient now than when I was a kid.

“way more”口语化，正式表达中用“much more”更合适。

× But over time, with the help of my parents and teachers, I got to know that patients and concentration makes essential part in our life.

✓ But over time, with the help of my parents and teachers, I got to know that patience and concentration make an essential part in our life.

“patients”应为“patience”；“makes”应与复数主语“patience and concentration”一致用“make”；缺少冠词“an”。