Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors like 'something bad happen' should be 'something bad happens'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I wouldn't say I'm completely patient because I tend to get stressed when things go wrong. However, I am patient in certain situations, such as when listening carefully to others.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs clearer structure and grammar corrections. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly, and avoid vague phrases like 'things are going really wild'. Be more specific about your feelings.

例: I feel impatient when things don't go as planned because it makes me feel out of control, which makes me nervous and frustrated.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, correct 'I am a plan person' to 'I am a planner'.

例: I feel quite excited because I'm a planner. When I have to do something for a long time, I make a plan first, which helps me feel comfortable and secure.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Use correct forms like 'patience' instead of 'patient' as a noun. Also, clarify your ideas and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: As a student, I believe patience is important because we need to handle difficult situations carefully. Moreover, being patient is essential in everyday life.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammar errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, definitely. I've become more patient because I've experienced more and learned to handle problems in relationships more thoughtfully.

× Actually I don't think I am a fully patient person because I do think I get stressed when something bad happen, but I am a patient person in some occasion like when I'm listening to others words.

✓ Actually I don't think I am a fully patient person because I do think I get stressed when something bad happens, but I am a patient person on some occasions like when I'm listening to others' words.

The verb 'happen' should be in the third person singular form 'happens' to agree with the singular subject 'something bad' (Grammar problem type ID: 27). 'Occasion' should be plural 'occasions' because it refers to multiple instances. Also, 'others words' should be 'others' words' to show possession.

× I guess if something didn't happen as I planned I would get impatient because I think the things are going really wild that it is out of my control, so I really get nervous about it and also some negative feeling.

✓ I guess if something doesn't happen as I plan I would get impatient because I think things are going really wild and it is out of my control, so I really get nervous about it and also have some negative feelings.

The sentence is about a hypothetical present/future situation, so 'didn't happen' should be 'doesn't happen' (Grammar problem type ID: 6). 'Planned' should be 'plan' to match present tense. 'The things' should be 'things' without 'the'. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match 'some'.

× I feel quite excited because I am a plan person. Plan always comes first. If I have to do something for a really long time, I do the plan first because it can make me feel comfortable and safe.

✓ I feel quite excited because I am a planned person. Planning always comes first. If I have to do something for a really long time, I make a plan first because it can make me feel comfortable and safe.

'Plan person' is incorrect; it should be 'planned person' or better 'a person who plans'. 'Plan always comes first' is better expressed as 'Planning always comes first'. 'Do the plan' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make a plan'.

× As a student, I think patient is important because we need to do something right when we some bad situation that happens in our life. But also it is important to be patient in our daily life as a person.

✓ As a student, I think patience is important because we need to do something right when we face some bad situations that happen in our life. But also it is important to be patient in our daily life as a person.

'Patient' is an adjective; the noun form 'patience' is needed here (Grammar problem type ID: 13). 'Some bad situation' should be plural 'some bad situations' to match 'some'. 'We some bad situation' is missing a verb; 'we face some bad situations' is correct.

× Yes, definitely, because I experienced more things and dealing with the problems during the relationship with others really helps me a lot with like thinking or doing more patiently.

✓ Yes, definitely, because I have experienced more things and dealing with problems during relationships with others really helps me a lot with thinking or doing things more patiently.

'Experienced' should be present perfect 'have experienced' to indicate experience up to now (Grammar problem type ID: 5). 'The problems' is better as 'problems' in general. 'During the relationship' should be 'during relationships' to generalize. 'Like thinking or doing more patiently' is awkward; 'thinking or doing things more patiently' is clearer.