Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用简单句表达原因。

例: I am not a very patient person. When I face difficult tasks, I often feel nervous and want to give up.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，表达不够清晰。建议用更准确的词汇和句子结构，明确区分原因，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: It depends on the situation. Sometimes I feel impatient because the task is too difficult. Other times, I feel impatient with myself because I tend to give up easily.

提案: 句子较长且结构不清晰，建议分成几句表达，使用连接词使逻辑更清楚，同时注意语法和词汇的准确性。

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually think it is a difficult task. At first, I try to focus and work hard. However, if it takes too long, I may lose confidence and give up.

提案: 回答中时态使用不当，表达不够自然。建议使用正确时态，简洁明了地说明工作需要耐心的原因。

例: Yes, my job requires me to be patient. I used to work as a salesperson, so I needed to be patient when dealing with customers to make sales.

提案: 回答中有多处语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，明确表达对比，并使用正确的时态和词汇。

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Before, I would give up easily when facing difficulties. But now, I try to be more patient and keep trying.

× I think I'm not a person who have patience.

✓ I think I'm not a person who has patience.

这里的主语是单数的"person"，所以谓语动词应该用第三人称单数形式"has"，而不是复数形式"have"。

× I really hate this personality I have when I met some hard thing need to do with I will nervous and don't don't want to continue this.

✓ I really hate this personality I have. When I meet some hard things I need to do, I get nervous and don't want to continue.

原句结构混乱，缺少必要的标点符号，导致句意不清。需要拆分成几个句子，并调整词序，使表达更清晰。

× When I met some hard thing need to do

✓ When I meet some hard things I need to do

"thing"应使用复数形式"things"，因为后文指的是多个需要做的困难事情。

× When I met some hard thing need to do

✓ When I meet some hard things I need to do

描述习惯性或一般事实时应使用一般现在时，"met"应改为"meet"。

× I will nervous and don't don't want to continue this.

✓ I get nervous and don't want to continue this.

"will nervous"结构错误，"nervous"是形容词，需用动词"get"搭配，且描述习惯动作用一般现在时。

× Sometimes it's about the things and sometimes it's about myself.

✓ Sometimes it's about things and sometimes it's about myself.

"the things"中不需要定冠词"the"，因为这里泛指事情。

× if the things is really difficult and hard to deal with

✓ if the things are really difficult and hard to deal with

"things"是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式"are"。

× If I need to do something for a long time, I will firstly think this is difficult tasks

✓ If I need to do something for a long time, I will first think this is a difficult task

"tasks"应与前面的"this is"保持一致，改为单数"task"，并加冠词"a"。

× I will firstly think this is difficult tasks

✓ I will first think this is a difficult task

"firstly"位置不当，改为"first"更自然，且放在助动词后。

× I will focus my attention at first to deal with these things

✓ I will focus my attention at first on dealing with these things

"focus attention"后应接介词"on"，且"deal with"改为动名词形式"dealing with"。

× Yes, my job required to be patient.

✓ Yes, my job requires me to be patient.

描述现在的工作应使用一般现在时"requires"，且"require"后需加宾语"me"。

× I need to ask my customer for some business.

✓ I need to ask my customer for some business.

此句无明显介词错误，保持原句。

× I need to ask my customer for some business.

✓ I need to ask my customers for some business.

"customer"应为复数形式"customers"，因为通常销售需要联系多个客户。

× So I need to show my great passion, wisdom to gain the money.

✓ So I need to show my great passion and wisdom to earn money.

"gain the money"表达不自然，改为"earn money"更合适，且需加连词"and"连接两个名词。

× Yes, when I was trial I don't have any patient and if I met some difficult things I will give up at first.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I didn't have any patience and if I met some difficult things I would give up at first.

"trial"应为"child"，"don't have"改为过去时"didn't have"，"patient"应为名词"patience"，条件句中"will"改为过去将来时"would"。

× if I met some difficult things

✓ if I met some difficult things

此处复数"things"使用正确，无需修改。

× But now I am an adult I am more patient because through some so some things are developing.

✓ But now I am an adult, I am more patient because some things have developed.

"through some so some things are developing"表达不清，改为"some things have developed"更符合语境，且时态用现在完成时。