Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has many grammar mistakes and unclear words like 'being a passion' instead of 'patient'. Try to use simple and correct sentences. Also, avoid repeating words and be more concise. For example, say 'Yes, I am a patient person because I work under pressure, and I try to control my anxiety and anger when problems arise.'

例: Yes, I am a patient person because I work in a stressful environment. When I face problems, I try to stay calm and control my anxiety and anger, which helps me handle situations better.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and has grammar errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases. For example, say 'I feel impatient when I cannot control my anxiety or anger during problems, especially when I have a lot of pressure at work.'

例: I feel impatient when I cannot control my anxiety or anger during difficult situations. Also, heavy pressure at work sometimes makes me lose patience.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammar mistakes and repetitions. Try to express your feelings clearly and use linking words. For example, say 'I usually find it hard to work for a long time. I feel frustrated and irritated, and sometimes I get anxious or angry because of work pressure.'

例: I usually find it difficult to work for a long time. It makes me feel frustrated and irritated, and sometimes I become anxious or angry due to the pressure at work.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has grammar errors. Try to give a clear and direct answer with examples. For example, say 'Yes, many jobs like doctors, engineers, bankers, and government employees require patience because they deal with many people.'

例: Yes, many jobs such as doctors, engineers, bankers, and government workers require patience because they often interact with the public and need to handle various situations calmly.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has many grammar mistakes. Try to compare your past and present patience clearly. For example, say 'I was a patient child, and now I am still patient both at work and home. I have learned to manage my patience well over time.'

例: I was a patient child, and now I continue to be patient at my workplace and with household chores. Over time, I have become better at managing my patience.

× Yes, I'm being a passion because I'm a working woman and my workplace have a lot of pressure.

✓ Yes, I'm patient because I'm a working woman and my workplace has a lot of pressure.

The phrase 'I'm being a passion' is incorrect. 'Being' is not used here; instead, the adjective 'patient' should be used to describe the speaker's quality. Also, 'passion' is a noun and does not fit here. The correct adjective is 'patient'. Additionally, 'workplace have' should be 'workplace has' due to subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I'm being a passion because I'm a working woman and my workplace have a lot of pressure.

✓ Yes, I'm patient because I'm a working woman and my workplace has a lot of pressure.

The subject 'workplace' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× But when I face any problem that time I I have a patient and also I control my anxiety and sometimes I control my anger, anger.

✓ But when I face any problem, at that time I am patient and also control my anxiety and sometimes my anger.

'I have a patient' is incorrect; 'patient' is an adjective here, so 'I am patient' is correct. Also, 'anger, anger' is repetitive and unnecessary. The sentence also needs a comma after 'problem' for clarity.

× And sometimes when I I have a lot of pressure to my workplace, that time I feel I'm impatient.

✓ And sometimes when I have a lot of pressure at my workplace, at that time I feel I'm impatient.

The phrase 'pressure to my workplace' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' for location. Also, 'that time' should be 'at that time' for correct expression.

× I usually feel usually feel hard to work a long time.

✓ I usually find it hard to work for a long time.

The phrase 'feel hard to work a long time' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'find it hard to work for a long time'. The preposition 'for' is necessary to indicate duration.

× That time I'm very very frustrated and irritate me and sometimes I avoid them to my anxiety or anger because workplace have a lot of pressures and it's sometime it's it's trying to come in quite which is very important.

✓ At that time, I feel very frustrated and irritated, and sometimes I avoid situations that increase my anxiety or anger because the workplace has a lot of pressure, and sometimes it's trying to become quiet, which is very important.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'irritate me' should be 'irritated' to describe feeling; 'avoid them to my anxiety or anger' is incorrect, should be 'avoid situations that increase my anxiety or anger'; 'workplace have' should be 'workplace has'; 'pressures' should be 'pressure' as uncountable; 'trying to come in quite' is unclear, corrected to 'trying to become quiet'. Pronouns and prepositions are misused here.

× There are a lot of a job or to require be patient like doctor, engineer, banker and government job holders because those type of job have a lot of require patience because they they can handle with the general people and sometimes they can handle with the their patient and their.

✓ There are a lot of jobs that require patience, like doctors, engineers, bankers, and government job holders because those types of jobs require a lot of patience since they handle the general public and sometimes their patients.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'a lot of a job' should be 'a lot of jobs'; 'to require be patient' should be 'that require patience'; 'doctor, engineer, banker' should be plural; 'those type of job' should be 'those types of jobs'; 'have a lot of require patience' is incorrect, should be 'require a lot of patience'; 'handle with' should be 'handle'; 'their patient and their' is incomplete and unclear, corrected to 'their patients'. This is a 'There be' issue combined with plural and preposition errors.

× When I was a child at that time I'm very a patient whenever actually I used to be a patient.

✓ When I was a child, I was very patient; actually, I used to be patient.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'I'm very a patient' is incorrect; it should be 'I was very patient' to match the past tense context. 'Whenever' is unnecessary here. 'Used to be patient' is correct for past habitual action.

× So actually I'm very manageable person.

✓ So actually, I'm a very manageable person.

The article 'a' is missing before 'very manageable person'. Also, a comma after 'actually' improves clarity.

× So I can enjoy that since my childhood to be a passion.

✓ So I have enjoyed being patient since my childhood.

'Enjoy that since my childhood to be a passion' is incorrect. The correct form is 'have enjoyed being patient since my childhood'. 'Being patient' is the correct verb + -ing form here, and 'passion' is incorrect; 'patient' is the adjective needed.