Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。例えば、過去形の動詞や冠詞の使い方に注意しましょう。

例: Yes, I am a patient person because when I was a student, I practiced tennis for a long time, which helped me develop patience.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的にも誤りが多いです。質問に対して明確に答え、理由や具体例を論理的に述べる練習が必要です。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、意味が通るようにしましょう。

例: I feel impatient when the weather is very hot in summer because it makes me uncomfortable. For example, sometimes the air conditioner in my room does not work well, which makes me even more impatient.

提案: 感情を表現する際の語彙や文法の使い方に改善が必要です。ストレスを感じる理由を明確にし、リラックス方法を具体的に述べると良いでしょう。接続詞を使って文をつなげる練習も重要です。

例: I feel uncomfortable and stressed when I have to do something for a long time. Therefore, I try to relax by taking breaks or listening to music.

提案: 回答が断片的で意味が伝わりにくいです。職業と忍耐力の関係を明確に説明し、具体的な例を挙げて話を豊かにしましょう。文法と語順にも注意してください。

例: Yes, my job in agriculture requires me to be patient because farming involves waiting for crops to grow, which takes a lot of time and care.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。過去と現在の比較を明確にし、具体的な経験や理由を述べる練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have learned to cope with many difficult problems.

× Yes I am because when I was a student I practice tennis for many time so it helps me more patient person.

✓ Yes I am because when I was a student I practiced tennis many times so it helped me become a more patient person.

The verbs 'practice' and 'helps' should be in the past tense 'practiced' and 'helped' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was a student'. Also, 'many time' should be 'many times' to correctly express frequency.

× Yes I am because when I was a student I practice tennis for many time so it helps me more patient person.

✓ Yes I am because when I was a student I practiced tennis many times so it helped me become a more patient person.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used with 'many time'; the correct phrase is 'many times' without 'for' to indicate frequency.

× Makes me feel impatient. It's so hot in summer, it makes me so impatient or pleasant. Because for example I was air conditioner in my room.

✓ It makes me feel impatient. It's so hot in summer, it makes me feel impatient or unpleasant. For example, I have an air conditioner in my room.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Makes me feel impatient' lacks a subject. 'Or pleasant' is incorrect; likely 'unpleasant' was intended. 'I was air conditioner' is incorrect; it should be 'I have an air conditioner' to express possession.

× It's so hot in summer, it makes me so impatient or pleasant.

✓ It's so hot in summer, it makes me feel so impatient or unpleasant.

The adjective 'pleasant' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is likely 'unpleasant'. Also, 'makes me so impatient or pleasant' is awkward; 'makes me feel so impatient or unpleasant' is clearer.

× Because for example I was air conditioner in my room.

✓ For example, I have an air conditioner in my room.

The phrase 'I was air conditioner' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I have an air conditioner' to indicate possession. Also, 'Because for example' is redundant; 'For example' alone suffices.

× I feel uncomfortable and stress so I have to do how to make me so relax and not stress.

✓ I feel uncomfortable and stressed, so I have to find ways to make myself relaxed and not stressed.

'Stress' should be the adjective 'stressed' to describe the feeling. 'Make me so relax' is incorrect; it should be 'make myself relaxed'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I feel uncomfortable and stress so I have to do how to make me so relax and not stress.

✓ I feel uncomfortable and stressed, so I have to find ways to make myself relaxed and not stressed.

The pronoun 'me' is incorrectly used; reflexive pronoun 'myself' is needed when the subject and object are the same person.

× For example I have time to relaxing me.

✓ For example, I take time to relax.

'To relaxing me' is incorrect; the correct form is the infinitive 'to relax'. Also, 'relaxing me' is awkward and ungrammatical.

× Yes, it is. My job is agriculture. It makes me it require me to be patient, to farmer and to crop, for example. It is.

✓ Yes, it does. My job is in agriculture. It requires me to be patient, for example, when farming and growing crops.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'It makes me it require me' is incorrect; 'It requires me' is correct. 'To farmer and to crop' is ungrammatical; 'when farming and growing crops' is clearer.

× My job is agriculture.

✓ My job is in agriculture.

The noun 'agriculture' requires the preposition 'in' to indicate the field of work.

× Yes I am, when I was a child a little patient thinks makes me so uncomfortable and sour less.

✓ Yes I am. When I was a child, being a little patient made me feel so uncomfortable and sour.

The verb 'makes' should be in past tense 'made' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Patient thinks' is unclear; likely 'being a little patient' is intended. 'Sour less' is incorrect; 'sour' alone is used.

× Yes I am, when I was a child a little patient thinks makes me so uncomfortable and sour less.

✓ Yes I am. When I was a child, being a little patient made me feel so uncomfortable and sour.

The phrase 'sour less' is incorrect; 'sour' is an adjective describing mood or feeling. Also, 'patient thinks' is unclear and should be 'being a little patient'.

× But now I I cope with many big problem.

✓ But now I cope with many big problems.

The sentence has a repeated word 'I I' and 'problem' should be plural 'problems' to agree with 'many'.