Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to combine your ideas into fewer sentences to avoid redundancy and improve fluency. Use linking words to connect your thoughts clearly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then explain why being patient helps you understand others, providing specific examples.

例: Yes, I consider myself a very patient person because it helps me understand others' situations better. For instance, when someone is going through a difficult time, my patience allows me to listen carefully and offer support, which leads to better relationships.

提案: Your answer is good but could be clearer with better sentence structure and linking words. Try to express your opinion directly and then explain your reasoning with examples or reasons to make it more effective.

例: I feel impatient when I see someone facing difficulties but not making any effort to improve. I believe everyone has the ability to overcome challenges if they keep trying, so I try to help those who are willing to accept it.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has some grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically, use linking words, and be specific about your feelings and strategies. Also, check your grammar and vocabulary for accuracy.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I prepare myself mentally by setting daily goals. This approach helps me stay calm and focused, making the task more manageable and less stressful.

提案: Your answer needs clearer sentence structure and linking words to connect ideas. Try to state your main point first, then explain why your job requires patience with specific details about your students' needs.

例: Yes, my job as a high school teacher requires a lot of patience because teenagers often need extra support and understanding. Being mentally prepared helps me stay calm and present to assist them effectively.

提案: Your answer is honest but could be improved by directly addressing the question and providing a clear opinion with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Honestly, I don't remember clearly how patient I was as a child, but I believe I have always been patient. This quality is important to me because it shapes who I am and helps me handle situations calmly.

× Because being that way allows me to understand others peoples situation or personal situation.

✓ Because being that way allows me to understand other people's situations or personal situations.

The phrase 'others peoples situation' is incorrect because 'others' and 'peoples' are redundant and improperly used. The correct possessive form is 'other people's', and 'situation' should be pluralized to 'situations' to match the context.

× And have a good results.

✓ And have good results.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'results'. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence structure.

× Getting in touch with someone else.

✓ Getting in touch with someone else helps.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb or subject. Adding 'helps' completes the sentence.

× I might say that whenever it is someone having a difficulty and they're not trying to get over it.

✓ I might say that whenever someone is having difficulty and they're not trying to get over it.

The phrase 'it is someone having a difficulty' is awkward. Rephrasing to 'someone is having difficulty' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I think we all have the skills to overcome situation if we keep trying, so I tend to help them if they allow me to.

✓ I think we all have the skills to overcome situations if we keep trying, so I tend to help them if they allow me to.

The noun 'situation' should be plural 'situations' to agree with the plural context.

× Before I start doing something for a long time, I make up my mind so I can be present.

✓ Before I start doing something for a long time, I make up my mind so I can be present.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× Realize in that I have to do to to do something special every day for a long time.

✓ I realize that I have to do something special every day for a long time.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repeated words 'to to'. Rephrasing to a complete sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× So that helps me to keep cab and relaxed with it.

✓ So that helps me to keep calm and relaxed with it.

The word 'cab' is a typo and should be 'calm' to correctly describe the state of being relaxed.

× Oh yes, my job does because I work in a high school as a teacher so as students at that age require a lot of patience and be mentally prepared for them so you can help them.

✓ Oh yes, my job does because I work at a high school as a teacher, so students at that age require a lot of patience and being mentally prepared for them helps you to help them.

The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to working at an institution. Also, the sentence structure is improved by rephrasing for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× To be present too.

✓ To be present too.

This is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the previous sentence or completed for clarity.

× Do you know what I actually, I don't remember how I was when I was a child, but I think I've been the same of my life.

✓ Do you know what? Actually, I don't remember how I was when I was a child, but I think I've been the same all my life.

The phrase 'the same of my life' is incorrect. It should be 'the same all my life'. Also, adding a question mark after 'Do you know what' improves clarity.