Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'Aye' and incomplete sentences. Make your answer more fluent and natural by combining ideas into complete sentences and using linking words to connect your thoughts.

例: Yes, I consider myself a very patient person because I like to listen carefully when others speak. Even if I feel angry or uncomfortable, I wait for them to finish before I respond.

提案: Avoid sentence fragments and improve grammar by using complete sentences. Use linking words to explain your feelings clearly and make your answer more coherent.

例: I feel impatient when I am speaking and the other person interrupts me before I finish. This makes me lose interest in the conversation because I cannot express my thoughts fully.

提案: Use correct verb tenses and more precise vocabulary. Also, add linking words to explain your strategy clearly and make your answer more natural.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I try to keep myself engaged by finding ways to entertain myself so that I don't lose interest in the task.

提案: Try to combine your ideas into fewer sentences using linking words for better flow. Also, avoid short, choppy sentences and be more specific about how patience helps in your job.

例: As a fashion designer, my job requires a lot of patience and creativity. When I feel impatient, I usually meditate or listen to refreshing music to regain my energy and return to work calmly.

提案: Correct grammar mistakes and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to connect your thoughts and provide specific examples to support your answer.

例: Yes, I have become more patient, especially in the last few years. After having my son, I learned that dealing with children requires a lot of patience, which has helped me improve my patience in other areas of life as well.

× I consider myself as a. Very patient person.

✓ I consider myself a very patient person.

The phrase 'consider myself as' is incorrect; 'consider myself' should be followed directly by the noun phrase without 'as'. Also, the sentence was fragmented with a period after 'a', which is incorrect. The corrected sentence combines the fragments into a complete sentence.

× If someone is interrupting in the middle, that. Make me impatient and it also. Makes me disinterested in that conversation.

✓ If someone interrupts in the middle, that makes me impatient and it also makes me disinterested in that conversation.

The verb must agree with the singular subject 'someone'. 'Is interrupting' should be 'interrupts' for simple present tense. Also, 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'that'. The sentence fragments with periods are corrected to form complete sentences.

× I try to make myself indulged in the task that I'm doing.

✓ I try to make myself indulge in the task that I'm doing.

The verb 'indulge' is not used with 'indulged' in this context. The correct form is 'make myself indulge' (bare infinitive) rather than 'make myself indulged'.

× I made myself entertained so that I don't lose interest in it.

✓ I make myself entertained so that I don't lose interest in it.

The sentence is about a habitual action, so present tense 'make' is appropriate instead of past tense 'made'.

× After having my son, I have learned that I have to delete things with patience with kids and that improve my overall patience in all the things that I do.

✓ After having my son, I have learned that I have to deal with things patiently with kids and that improves my overall patience in all the things that I do.

The phrase 'delete things with patience' is incorrect; it should be 'deal with things patiently'. Also, 'that improve' should be 'that improves' to agree with singular subject 'that'.