Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения, такие как "more padding" и "you do your best to be higher in a position you don't". Рекомендуется использовать более простые и правильные конструкции, избегать повторений и улучшить связность речи.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I try to stay calm in difficult situations. For example, when I face challenges at work, I take my time to think carefully before reacting. This helps me to handle problems more effectively and avoid frustration.

提案: Ответ не полностью ясен и содержит противоречия, например, утверждение "I am an impatient person" и "there is nothing that makes me feel furious". Следует давать прямой ответ на вопрос и использовать связные предложения с подходящими примерами.

例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for a long time, such as waiting in a long queue or when someone is late. This makes me feel frustrated because I value my time and want things to move quickly.

提案: Ответ содержит много грамматических ошибок и неясных выражений, например, "It is are those?" и "listening music make me come". Рекомендуется строить предложения более логично и использовать связки для плавности речи.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually listen to music or take short breaks to relax. This helps me stay focused and prevents me from feeling tired or frustrated.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки и нечеткие выражения, например, "I try to do any hobby" и "so I am. Being focused because long task". Следует использовать более точные формулировки и связные предложения, чтобы ясно выразить мысль.

例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I often deal with difficult situations. To stay calm, I listen to music during breaks and focus on my tasks carefully to avoid mistakes.

提案: Ответ содержит фрагменты и грамматические ошибки, например, "this thing come" и разорванные предложения. Рекомендуется строить полные и связные предложения, чтобы четко выразить свои мысли.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have learned to control my emotions. For example, I can focus better on my work and handle stressful situations calmly, which I couldn't do before.

× Patient is something that every person should have.

✓ Patience is something that every person should have.

The word 'patient' is an adjective meaning 'able to wait calmly', but here the noun 'patience' (the quality of being patient) is required. Using 'patient' instead of 'patience' is incorrect because the sentence needs a noun to describe the quality one should have.

× Not having patient may lead to becoming furious.

✓ Not having patience may lead to becoming furious.

Again, 'patient' is an adjective, but the sentence requires the noun 'patience' to refer to the quality one lacks. Using 'patient' here is a misuse of the adjective instead of the noun.

× I am a patient person and I tried to be more padding all the time.

✓ I am a patient person and I try to be more patient all the time.

The word 'padding' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'patient'. Also, 'tried' should be 'try' to match the present tense context. 'Padding' is unrelated and incorrect in this context.

× It's very good becaused you try hard, you do your best to be higher in a position you don't.

✓ It's very good because you try hard and do your best to get a higher position.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; the correct word is 'because'. The phrase 'to be higher in a position you don't' is awkward and ungrammatical; it should be 'to get a higher position'. Also, 'and' is needed to connect the clauses properly.

× I am an impatient person, so there is nothing that makes me feel. Furious, for example, when I face challenge at work or school.

✓ I am an impatient person, so there is nothing that makes me feel furious, for example, when I face challenges at work or school.

The period after 'feel' is incorrect and breaks the sentence. 'Furious' should not be capitalized here. Also, 'challenge' should be plural 'challenges' to match the context. The sentence should be continuous and properly punctuated.

× It is are those? When you have to do something for a long time, so I tried to put on some music or may do my hobby.

✓ When you have to do something for a long time, I try to put on some music or do my hobby.

The phrase 'It is are those?' is nonsensical and should be removed. The sentence structure is awkward; 'so I tried' should be 'I try' to maintain present tense and clarity. 'May do my hobby' is incorrect; it should be 'do my hobby' or 'pursue my hobby'.

× When I have to do something for a long time becauses it may lead to becoming more aggressive so listening music make me come.

✓ When I have to do something for a long time, it may lead to becoming more aggressive, so listening to music helps me calm down.

'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'Listening music' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'listening to music'. 'Make me come' is incorrect and unclear; the intended meaning is 'helps me calm down' or 'makes me calm'.

× Every job requires to be patient.

✓ Every job requires you to be patient.

The verb 'requires' needs an object; 'you' is necessary to indicate who needs to be patient. Without 'you', the sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical.

× So when I have to do something in my job, I try to do any hobby.

✓ So when I have to do something in my job, I try to do some hobby.

The phrase 'any hobby' is incorrect here; 'some hobby' or 'a hobby' is appropriate to indicate an activity done to relax. 'Any' is generally used in negative or interrogative sentences.

× Or listen to music that makes me feel calm, so I am. Being focused because long task.

✓ Or listen to music that makes me feel calm, so I am focused because of long tasks.

The phrase 'Being focused because long task' is ungrammatical. It should be 'I am focused because of long tasks.' The preposition 'because of' is needed to explain the reason. Also, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the context.

× Yes, I'm more patient now than when I was a child because I grew up and now I understand this thing come.

✓ Yes, I'm more patient now than when I was a child because I grew up and now I understand this concept.

The phrase 'this thing come' is incorrect and unclear. It should be replaced with 'this concept' or 'this idea' to convey understanding. 'Come' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× And having a patience may. Help me. To focus on my job.

✓ And having patience may help me to focus on my job.

'A patience' is incorrect; 'patience' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article 'a'. The sentence is broken into fragments with unnecessary periods; it should be one continuous sentence.