Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows good intent but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases that affect clarity. Try to use simpler, correct sentences and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I am definitely a patient person because patience helps me handle stressful situations calmly."

例: Yes, I am definitely a patient person because I believe staying calm helps me manage difficult situations more effectively.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Focus on directly answering the question with clear sentences. Use linking words to explain your reasons. For example, "Although I am usually patient, I feel impatient when I have to complete a task at the last minute without the right materials."

例: Although I am usually patient, I feel impatient when I have to finish something quickly but don't have the necessary materials.

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, clarify your example. For instance, "I stay calm and focused when working for long periods, such as when I prepare burgers according to customers' preferences."

例: I stay calm and focused when I have to work for a long time, like when I prepare burgers exactly as customers want.

提案: Your answer is good but could be clearer and more structured. Avoid sentence fragments and use linking words. For example, "My job as a customer representative requires a lot of patience because being calm and polite helps manage frustrated customers."

例: My job as a customer representative requires a lot of patience because staying calm and polite helps me handle frustrated customers effectively.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct tenses and clearer sentences. For example, "I am more patient now than when I was a child because I didn't understand patience back then and would get impatient easily."

例: I am more patient now than when I was a child because I didn't understand patience before and often got frustrated quickly.

× Definitely I am a patient person becauses having a patience and every situation is very valuable becauses in ciety and stress can even worse things.

✓ Definitely, I am a patient person because having patience and every situation is very valuable because in society, stress can even make things worse.

The sentence contains spelling errors ('becauses' should be 'because', 'ciety' should be 'society') and incorrect word usage ('having a patience' should be 'having patience'). Also, 'stress can even worse things' is incorrect; it should be 'stress can even make things worse'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Definitely I am a patient person becauses having a patience and every situation is very valuable becauses in ciety and stress can even worse things.

✓ Definitely, I am a patient person because having patience and every situation is very valuable because in society, stress can even make things worse.

The phrase 'having a patience' incorrectly uses the singular article 'a' with an uncountable noun 'patience'. Removing 'a' corrects the singular/plural issue.

× Definitely I am a patient person becauses having a patience and every situation is very valuable becauses in ciety and stress can even worse things.

✓ Definitely, I am a patient person because having patience and every situation is very valuable because in society, stress can even make things worse.

The preposition 'in' before 'ciety' (society) is correct, but the sentence structure is awkward. The phrase 'because in society' should be connected properly to the rest of the sentence for clarity.

× Socially I am launch feel impatient because I'm a very patient person but if the situation arises like.

✓ Socially, I rarely feel impatient because I'm a very patient person, but if a situation arises like...

The original sentence has unclear pronoun and word usage ('launch' likely intended as 'rarely'). Correcting to 'I rarely feel impatient' clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun use.

× Socially I am launch feel impatient because I'm a very patient person but if the situation arises like.

✓ Socially, I rarely feel impatient because I'm a very patient person, but if a situation arises like...

The sentence is incomplete and awkwardly structured. Adding commas and completing the thought improves sentence structure and clarity.

× If I need to do something and there is last time and I don't have the appropriate materials and I'm becoming patients at that time.

✓ If I need to do something and there is little time and I don't have the appropriate materials, I become impatient at that time.

'Last time' is incorrect; 'little time' is the correct quantifier. Also, 'patients' should be 'impatient' to describe the feeling.

× If I need to do something and there is last time and I don't have the appropriate materials and I'm becoming patients at that time.

✓ If I need to do something and there is little time and I don't have the appropriate materials, I become impatient at that time.

The adjective 'patients' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'impatient' to describe the feeling of lacking patience.

× I remain very calm and composed when I have to do something in continuity for a longer period of time for example and working in harvest and all the time I need to garnish the customers burger as they want.

✓ I remain very calm and composed when I have to do something continuously for a longer period of time; for example, working in harvest, and all the time I need to prepare the customers' burgers as they want.

'In continuity' is incorrect; 'continuously' is the correct adverb. Also, 'garnish the customers burger' is incorrect; 'prepare the customers' burgers' is more appropriate. The possessive form 'customers'' is needed for plural possessive.

× I remain very calm and composed when I have to do something in continuity for a longer period of time for example and working in harvest and all the time I need to garnish the customers burger as they want.

✓ I remain very calm and composed when I have to do something continuously for a longer period of time; for example, working in harvest, and all the time I need to prepare the customers' burgers as they want.

'Customers burger' lacks the possessive apostrophe; it should be 'customers' burgers' to indicate the burgers belong to multiple customers.

× So at that time I remained calm and composed and listen to the customer preferences.

✓ So at that time, I remained calm and composed and listened to the customers' preferences.

The verb 'listen' should be in past tense 'listened' to match the past tense 'remained'. Also, 'customer preferences' should be plural possessive 'customers' preferences'.

× As I'm doing the customer representative job so it requires a lot of patience and.

✓ As I'm doing the customer representative job, it requires a lot of patience and...

The conjunction 'so' is unnecessary and creates redundancy with 'as'. A comma after the introductory clause improves sentence flow.

× As I'm doing the customer representative job so it requires a lot of patience and. Composed person, so I am, and I think being patient and polite can even control the most frustrated customers.

✓ As I'm doing the customer representative job, it requires a lot of patience and composure, which I have. I think being patient and polite can even control the most frustrated customers.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining ideas and correcting sentence fragments improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I believe that I am more patient than I will. So child, because as a child I don't know what the patient means.

✓ I believe that I am more patient than I was as a child because, as a child, I didn't know what patience means.

'I will. So child' is incorrect; it should be 'I was as a child'. Also, 'patient' should be 'patience' (noun). The tense is corrected to past to match the time reference.

× I believe that I am more patient than I will. So child, because as a child I don't know what the patient means.

✓ I believe that I am more patient than I was as a child because, as a child, I didn't know what patience means.

The verb tense 'don't know' should be past tense 'didn't know' to refer to the past time 'as a child'.

× So if I would need anything, I become impatient and ask my parents, just give me that.

✓ So if I needed anything, I became impatient and asked my parents, 'Just give me that.'

The conditional 'if I would need' is incorrect; it should be 'if I needed'. Also, past tense verbs 'became' and 'asked' are needed to maintain past narrative consistency.