Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的に正しくなく、意味が伝わりにくいです。簡潔で明確な文を使い、感情や状況を具体的に説明する練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I rarely get angry or upset in my daily life.

提案: 回答が質問に直接答えておらず、内容が混乱しています。質問に対して具体的な理由や状況を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for a long time without knowing how long it will take, such as during delays or queues.

提案: 文が断片的で流れが悪いです。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、より自然で流暢な表現を心がけましょう。

例: It depends on the task; if I enjoy what I'm doing, I can focus and work on it for a long time without feeling tired.

提案: 内容は理解できますが、文法や語彙の誤りがあり、表現が不自然です。正しい文法を使い、ストレスの理由を具体的に説明すると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, my job as a clinical research associate requires a lot of patience because I often have to communicate between hospitals and pharmaceutical companies, which can be stressful.

提案: 文が短く断片的なので、比較の理由や具体例を加えて、より詳しく説明する練習をしましょう。

例: I believe I am more patient now than when I was a child because my experience as a nurse taught me how to stay calm in difficult situations.

× I think I'm a patient person be 'cause I. Larry. Getting mad, world. Be upset. Upset. In my daily dives.

✓ I think I'm a patient person because I rarely get mad or upset in my daily life.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper sentence structure, making it difficult to understand. The correction combines the fragments into a coherent sentence with proper conjunctions and verb forms.

× I think my experience as an ICE makes me more patient.

✓ I think my experience as an ICE makes me more patient.

No correction needed here as the preposition use is correct.

× I used to be a nurse before I studied my current carrier, and it's a nurse.

✓ I used to be a nurse before I studied for my current career.

The original sentence has a redundancy and incorrect word 'carrier' instead of 'career'. Also, 'and it's a nurse' is unclear and unnecessary. The correction removes redundancy and corrects the word choice.

× I had to handle many difficult situations and many difficulties dim and so.

✓ I had to handle many difficult situations and challenges.

The phrase 'many difficulties dim and so' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. The correction simplifies and clarifies the sentence.

× I think it depends on what I have to do in detail.

✓ I think it depends on the details of what I have to do.

The original sentence is awkwardly phrased. The correction improves clarity and naturalness.

× If. I have to do the things what I like.

✓ If I have to do things that I like,

The original sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect relative pronoun 'what'. The correction combines the fragment and uses 'that' correctly.

× I can do it for a very long time.

✓ I can do it for a very long time.

No correction needed; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I have to work at advocate between the hospitals and direct developing companies so I sometimes feel stressful.

✓ I have to work as an advocate between the hospitals and direct developing companies, so I sometimes feel stressed.

The phrase 'work at advocate' is incorrect; it should be 'work as an advocate'. Also, 'feel stressful' should be 'feel stressed' to correctly express the feeling.

× About my tasks.

✓ about my tasks.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased.

× I think I'm more patient comparing. To my childhood.

✓ I think I'm more patient compared to when I was a child.

The phrase 'more patient comparing to my childhood' is incorrect. The correction uses 'compared to when I was a child' for proper comparison.