Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question first, then support your answer with clear reasons. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I am generally an impatient person because I tend to get frustrated easily. However, during difficult times, I remind myself that patience is important to overcome challenges.

提案: Your answer is quite confusing and has grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. Provide specific details and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I feel impatient when I discover that someone I love has spoken badly about me behind my back. Such situations make me feel very upset and restless.

提案: Your answer is positive but contains some awkward phrases and spelling errors. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Also, link your ideas clearly and avoid redundancy.

例: I feel enthusiastic when I spend a long time painting in my cozy room. It makes me feel relaxed and comfortable.

提案: Your answer is unclear and fragmented. Try to form complete sentences and directly answer the question. Explain how your job requires patience with specific examples and use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, my job can be hectic, so I need to be patient when dealing with stressful situations. For example, I take deep breaths for 10 to 15 minutes to stay calm during busy days.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Try to clearly compare your past and present patience levels. Use correct grammar and vocabulary, and avoid unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to be rebellious and immature, but as I grew up, I learned to control my emotions and became more patient.

× As having an introvert personality, I believe that I am impatient person because I have realized several times.

✓ As having an introverted personality, I believe that I am an impatient person because I have realized it several times.

The adjective 'introvert' should be 'introverted' to correctly describe personality. Also, 'impatient person' needs the article 'an' before it. The phrase 'I have realized several times' is incomplete; adding 'it' clarifies the object of realization.

× In my difficult times, I told to my mind and my heart that patience is the only thing to battle the situation.

✓ In my difficult times, I told my mind and my heart that patience is the only thing to battle the situation.

The verb 'told' does not require the preposition 'to' when followed by the indirect object. The correct structure is 'told someone something' without 'to'.

× The most worst situation I had to face that when a person which was my loved ones used to abuse me in my back and I heard that from somewhere else.

✓ The worst situation I had to face was when a person who was one of my loved ones used to abuse me behind my back and I heard that from somewhere else.

'Most worst' is incorrect; 'worst' alone is the superlative form. 'Which' should be 'who' when referring to people. 'Loved ones' is plural, so 'a person who was one of my loved ones' is clearer. 'In my back' should be 'behind my back' as the correct prepositional phrase.

× This is the worst situation I can imagine an it make me so impatience.

✓ This is the worst situation I can imagine and it makes me so impatient.

'An' should be 'and' to connect clauses. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Impatience' is a noun; the adjective 'impatient' is needed here.

× I feel so enthusiastic when I do painting at my cozy corner in my room.

✓ I feel so enthusiastic when I paint at my cozy corner in my room.

The verb 'do' is unnecessary before 'painting'; 'paint' is the correct verb. 'Do painting' is not standard English.

× This makes me feel so overwhelmed and I feel very comfort table.

✓ This makes me feel so overwhelmed and I feel very comfortable.

'Comfort table' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'comfortable'.

× Indeed, I usually. Hand. A hectic day.

✓ Indeed, I usually have a hectic day.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a verb. Combining the fragments into a complete sentence with subject and verb corrects the structure.

× So for that I have to become a patience person with her helping me today to that situation and makes me feel calm.

✓ So for that, I have to become a patient person who helps me deal with that situation and makes me feel calm.

'Patience' is a noun; the adjective 'patient' is needed. 'With her helping me today to that situation' is unclear and incorrect; rephrased to 'who helps me deal with that situation' for clarity and correctness.

× So in office I used to take 10 to 15 minutes long breath.

✓ So in the office, I usually take a 10 to 15 minute long breath.

Missing article 'the' before 'office'. 'Used to take' implies past habit; 'usually take' fits present context better. '10 to 15 minutes long breath' should be 'a 10 to 15 minute long breath' for correct quantifier and article usage.

× Yes, I can record my infancy memories.

✓ Yes, I can recall my infancy memories.

'Record' is incorrect in this context; 'recall' means to remember, which fits better when talking about memories.

× I was a kind of rebellious kid.

✓ I was a kind of rebellious kid.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× My mother used to call me Rebel Kit.

✓ My mother used to call me Rebel Kid.

'Kit' is a typo; the correct word is 'Kid'.

× Because I was so immature an impression as I grew up, I improve my personality.

✓ Because I was so immature and impressionable, as I grew up, I improved my personality.

'An impression' is incorrect; 'impressionable' is the correct adjective. 'Improve' should be past tense 'improved' to match 'as I grew up'.

× Now I am in impatience and mature ****.

✓ Now I am patient and mature.

'In impatience' is incorrect; 'patient' is the correct adjective. The '****' is unclear and omitted for clarity.