Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和冗长，使用更准确的词汇表达情绪和情况。

例: I am not a very patient person because I tend to get nervous and anxious when things don't go as planned. For example, if someone is late, I often find it hard to stay calm.

提案: 回答中语法和用词不准确，句子结构混乱。建议使用更清晰的句子表达原因，并用连接词使内容连贯。

例: I often feel impatient when I have to do long and boring assignments. For example, I get easily distracted by my mobile phone or other things around me.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，存在语法错误和词汇使用错误。建议简化句子，明确表达感受，并使用恰当的词汇。

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel bored and impatient. For example, I find it hard to concentrate and often get distracted by things around me.

提案: 回答内容混乱且不相关，语法错误严重。建议直接回答问题，说明工作或学习中需要耐心的具体原因，并使用正确的词汇。

例: I am currently studying business, and my course requires me to be patient because I need to collect and analyze data carefully for financial reports.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，内容不连贯。建议用简单明了的句子表达对比，并提供具体例子。

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to get distracted easily and could not focus for more than five minutes, which made my parents angry.

× And don't think I'm a patient person be 'cause whenever I'm feel uncomfortable or something unpleasant happens expectedly and tend to get nervous and anxious easily.

✓ And don't think I'm a patient person because whenever I feel uncomfortable or something unpleasant happens unexpectedly, I tend to get nervous and anxious easily.

这里的错误是动词的现在分词形式使用错误。'I'm feel' 应改为 'I feel'，因为 'feel' 是动词原形，跟在助动词 'am' 后面不需要加 '-ing'。另外，'expectedly' 应为 'unexpectedly'，表示意外发生。

× For example if someone is late or if things don't go as planned and often find it hard to stay calm.

✓ For example, if someone is late or if things don't go as planned, I often find it hard to stay calm.

句子缺少主语，'often find' 前应加主语 'I'。这是动词现在分词形式使用错误，缺少主语导致句子结构不完整。

× I'm easily to feel impatient at diverse occasions on, for example, if I'm doing one assignment that is very long and very boring, and find myself very easily distracted by anything else, such as the mobile phone of the other.

✓ I easily feel impatient on diverse occasions, for example, if I'm doing an assignment that is very long and very boring, and find myself easily distracted by anything else, such as someone else's mobile phone.

'easily to feel' 中 'to' 不应出现，正确用法是 'easily feel'。'at diverse occasions on' 介词使用错误，应为 'on diverse occasions'。此外，'the mobile phone of the other' 应改为 'someone else's mobile phone'，更自然。

× On on how to do something for long term and you already feel quite bored and impatient.

✓ When doing something for a long term, you already feel quite bored and impatient.

'On on how to do something for long term' 介词使用错误且表达不清，应改为 'When doing something for a long term'，表示“当做某事很长时间时”。

× For example, if I'm working on our active task and find it hard to concentrate and often get distracted by other things around me.

✓ For example, if I'm working on a task and find it hard to concentrate and often get distracted by other things around me.

'our active task' 中 'our' 使用不当，应该是泛指某个任务，改为 'a task' 更合适。

× This makes it challenging to stay folks for extended furious.

✓ This makes it challenging to stay focused for an extended period.

'stay folks' 是错误表达，应为 'stay focused'，表示保持专注。'extended furious' 也不合适，应为 'an extended period'，表示较长时间。

× I'm doing a business degree now in the unit and and to think my subjective required to be a very patient person because I'll be the nurse.

✓ I'm doing a business degree now at the university and I think my subject requires me to be a very patient person because I'll be a nurse.

'in the unit' 应为 'at the university'。'to think my subjective required' 语法错误，应为 'I think my subject requires me'。'the nurse' 应为 'a nurse'，表示职业。

× How a loss to do Waze data with collecting data and calculate them and doing the financial report for exam.

✓ I have to collect data, calculate them, and do the financial report for exams.

句子结构混乱，'How a loss to do Waze data' 无意义，应改为 'I have to collect data'。'doing the financial report for exam' 应改为 'do the financial report for exams'，动词形式和介词使用正确。

× Oh yeah, I think I'm more patient now then when I was young.

✓ Oh yeah, I think I'm more patient now than when I was young.

'then' 用错，应为比较连词 'than'，表示比较。

× I remember I'm also chardan. Can't focus on anything for more than 5 minutes, even distracted by the window will words eating lunch and make my Paris very angry.

✓ I remember I was also a child. I couldn't focus on anything for more than 5 minutes, even distracted by the window while eating lunch, which made my parents very angry.

'I'm also chardan' 应为 'I was also a child'。'will words eating lunch' 应为 'while eating lunch'。'make my Paris very angry' 应为 'made my parents very angry'。代词和拼写错误较多，需改正。