Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains several grammatical errors and repetitions. Try to give a clear, concise response directly addressing the question, followed by a supporting detail. Avoid filler words and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For instance, I am willing to invest a lot of time and effort into tasks I am passionate about, and I always try to help others when they need assistance, regardless of the effort required.

提案: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand due to incorrect word choices and sentence structure. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: What makes me feel impatient is waiting for someone who is late. I find it frustrating because it wastes valuable time that could be used more productively.

提案: Your response is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your feelings clearly and provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: I feel comfortable doing something for a long time if it leads to a positive outcome. However, if the task is pointless or unnecessary, I find it frustrating and a waste of time.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Make sure to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Clearly explain how patience is important in your job with specific examples.

例: Yes, my job as an administration officer requires a great deal of patience. For example, I need to pay close attention to details and handle various requests from colleagues calmly and efficiently.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains incorrect word choices such as 'depression' instead of 'patience'. Focus on clear, grammatically correct sentences and explain how your patience has improved with specific reasons or examples.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Over the past two years of studying and working, I have learned to stay calm and pay close attention to details, especially when handling difficult requests from my colleagues.

× Yes I am. I'm I'm only to put a lot of time or effort into something I'm really I'm really passionate about.

✓ Yes, I am. I only put a lot of time or effort into something I'm really passionate about.

The phrase 'I'm only to put' is incorrect because 'to put' is an infinitive and does not fit here. The correct form is the simple present tense 'I only put' to express habitual action. Also, repeated 'I'm' is redundant and should be removed.

× Oh and also if someone is asking for help and I'm. Ann wanted to help people who have it in it.

✓ Oh, and also if someone is asking for help, I want to help people who need it.

The sentence has unclear pronoun use and incomplete phrases. 'I'm. Ann wanted' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'I want' to express willingness. 'People who have it in it' is unclear; 'people who need it' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× No matter what it cost, as long as I can probably some help.

✓ No matter what it costs, as long as I can provide some help.

The phrase 'No matter what it cost' should be 'No matter what it costs' to agree with the present tense context. Also, 'I can probably some help' is incorrect; the verb 'provide' or 'give' is needed before 'some help'.

× I think it's the top one list of things makes me feel impression is waiting someone.

✓ I think the top thing that makes me feel impatient is waiting for someone.

'Top one list of things' is incorrect; it should be 'the top thing'. 'Feel impression' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'impatient'. Also, 'waiting someone' requires the preposition 'for'.

× Out of the time, which we have a point in a moment.

✓ Out of the time we have at the moment.

The phrase 'a point in a moment' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'at the moment' to indicate the current time. Also, 'out of the time' is acceptable but needs to be connected properly.

× I think this is kind of irritated and.

✓ I think this is kind of irritating.

'Irritated' is an adjective describing a feeling, but here the subject is the situation causing the feeling, so 'irritating' (present participle) is correct.

× Is kind of a waste of time. I don't think that we should be avoided of.

✓ It is kind of a waste of time. I don't think that we should avoid it.

'Avoided of' is incorrect; the verb 'avoid' does not require a preposition. Also, the sentence needs a subject 'It' at the beginning.

× I think you do something for a long time is actually happens in daily life.

✓ I think doing something for a long time actually happens in daily life.

The original sentence has incorrect structure. Using the gerund 'doing' as the subject is correct. 'Is actually happens' is redundant; 'actually happens' suffices.

× I think it's OK if if, as long as it makes some positive difference.

✓ I think it's OK as long as it makes some positive difference.

The repeated 'if if' is incorrect and unnecessary. The phrase 'as long as' alone is sufficient to express the condition.

× Spot if you just did. Jupit and unnecessarily I think it says kind of waste time.

✓ But if you just did it unnecessarily, I think it is kind of a waste of time.

The sentence has unclear words 'Spot' and 'Jupit' which seem to be errors. 'But' is the correct conjunction. 'Did it unnecessarily' is the correct phrase. 'Says kind of waste time' is incorrect; 'is kind of a waste of time' is correct.

× Yes, as an administration officer it is request a lot of impressions not only to the details but also into the worker related stuff.

✓ Yes, as an administration officer, it requires a lot of patience not only with details but also with work-related stuff.

'It is request' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it requires'. 'Impressions' is incorrect; the intended word is 'patience'. Prepositions 'to' and 'into' are incorrect; 'with' is correct here.

× I think impatient makes it difference make a positive difference on my daily work.

✓ I think patience makes a positive difference in my daily work.

'Impatient' is an adjective; the noun 'patience' is correct here. 'Makes it difference make' is redundant and incorrect; 'makes a positive difference' is correct. The preposition 'on' should be 'in'.

× Yeah, as a child I used to be very impatient, but now after years on start of two years of study and work experience if it requires me a lot of patients and also pay close attention to details under harder various request for my colleagues.

✓ Yeah, as a child I used to be very impatient, but now after two years of study and work experience, it requires me to have a lot of patience and to pay close attention to details under various harder requests from my colleagues.

The sentence has tense and word form errors. 'If it requires' should be 'it requires'. 'Patients' is incorrect; the noun 'patience' is needed. 'Under harder various request' should be 'under various harder requests'. Prepositions corrected to 'from'.

× I think depression helps me stay calm and organized.

✓ I think patience helps me stay calm and organized.

'Depression' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'patience' which fits the meaning of the sentence.