Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用连贯的表达方式。

例: I am not a very patient person because I get bored easily. For example, if I try to practice a sport for a long time, I usually lose interest and stop.

提案: 回答中有很多语法错误和重复，表达不清晰。建议使用简单明了的句子，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for a long time or when people repeat the same things many times.

提案: 表达有些混乱，语法错误较多。建议先给出明确的观点，然后用连贯的句子详细说明原因。

例: I usually feel bored when I have to do something for a long time because I am not very patient. Therefore, I tend to give up and try to do something more interesting.

提案: 回答内容较好，但表达不够流畅，有重复和语法错误。建议使用更自然的表达，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, my studies require me to be patient. For example, when I work on university assessments or solve difficult math problems, I need to be patient to understand and complete them.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议先明确表达观点，然后用连贯的句子说明原因。

例: I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have become more mature. I understand the importance of focusing on my work and studies and planning my next steps carefully.

× For example, when I keep one night do something for a long time about field. Sport.

✓ For example, when I keep doing something for a long time in the field of sport overnight.

动词keep后应接动名词形式doing，表示持续做某事。原句中缺少doing，导致语法错误。

× And I can't constant to do it again.

✓ And I can't constantly do it again.

形容词constant应改为副词constantly，修饰动词do。原句中错误使用了形容词，导致表达不准确。

× Personally speaking, there are a lot of things make me feel impatient.

✓ Personally speaking, there are a lot of things that make me feel impatient.

复数名词things后应有关系代词that引导定语从句，缺少that导致句子结构不完整。

× For example, oh when someone like me wait for a long time.

✓ For example, when someone like me waits for a long time.

动词wait应与第三人称单数主语someone保持一致，使用waits。

× And uh, someone want in someone tell tell me a things for a lot of for many times I will feel really impatient.

✓ And uh, when someone wants to tell me things many times, I will feel really impatient.

动词want应与第三人称单数主语someone保持一致，使用wants；句子结构混乱，需调整使表达清晰。

× Through my point of view, I will feel bored when I do something for a long time.

✓ From my point of view, I will feel bored when I do something for a long time.

固定短语是from my point of view，使用through my point of view是不正确的介词搭配。

× The main reason it said I can't, I'm impatient person.

✓ The main reason is that I can't; I'm an impatient person.

句中it said用法错误，应使用is that引导原因状语从句；同时缺少冠词an。

× I can't stand to do something for a long constant too.

✓ I can't stand doing something for a long time constantly.

短语can't stand后应接动名词doing；constant应改为副词constantly；表达更自然。

× Do something for a long time, I will give up and determined to do another meaningful things.

✓ If I do something for a long time, I will give up and be determined to do other meaningful things.

动词短语缺少if引导条件句；determined前缺少be动词；things应为复数形式，且other比another更合适。

× Actually, I'm a student. The main reason is that when I finish some university assessment, I must be patient to collect the data, for example when I finish my final.

✓ Actually, I'm a student. The main reason is that when I finish some university assessments, I must be patient in collecting the data; for example, when I finish my final exam.

assessment应为复数assessments；be patient后应接介词in；final后应加名词exam。

× Final exam. There are some math problem I need to workout and I must be patient.

✓ Final exam. There are some math problems I need to work out, and I must be patient.

problem应为复数problems；workout应分开为work out。

× As for myself, so I am more patient now that when I was a child.

✓ As for myself, I am more patient now than when I was a child.

比较结构中应使用than而非that。

× The mirrors and is that as time goes by I become more mature and I.

✓ The reason is that as time goes by, I become more mature.

句子结构混乱，mirrors应为reason，句尾不完整，需删去多余部分。

× Need to understand what things I will do, next steps and I must pay more attention on my job and studies.

✓ I need to understand what things I will do next, the next steps, and I must pay more attention to my job and studies.

pay attention后应接介词to；句子缺少主语I；next steps前应加定冠词the。