Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'some time' nên là 'sometimes', 'An I see' nên là 'and I see'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp lại ý. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, mạch lạc và có liên kết logic.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person now. In the past, I used to lose my temper easily over small things, but I have learned to control my emotions better. As a result, my life has improved significantly.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không được truyền đạt hiệu quả. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh dùng những cụm từ không chính xác như 'something makes me feel like I need to be more hurried'. Hãy tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và dùng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: I feel impatient when people rush me to finish my work quickly. It makes me stressed because I prefer to do things carefully and at my own pace.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn bị ngắt quãng và thiếu mạch lạc, có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ không chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, có cấu trúc tốt với câu chủ đề và câu bổ sung, sử dụng liên từ để nối ý.

例: I usually feel bored and a bit impatient when I have to work on a task for many hours. However, if I know my goal clearly, I try to stay focused and complete the work despite the difficulties.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và câu không hoàn chỉnh, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng phù hợp để diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc.

例: Definitely, my job as a teacher requires a lot of patience. I need to explain things clearly and answer students' questions carefully to help them understand.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không đúng như 'average Bart' không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, tránh dùng từ không chính xác và cấu trúc câu hợp lý để truyền đạt ý tưởng.

例: Yes, I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. It is one of the biggest improvements in my life, and I am proud of how I have changed my behavior for the better.

× some time I lost my mind

✓ sometimes I lost my mind

The phrase 'some time' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'sometimes' to indicate occasional occurrences. 'Some time' refers to an unspecified amount of time, while 'sometimes' means 'occasionally'.

× with even a small action from other people

✓ with even a small action by other people

The preposition 'from' is incorrect in this context; 'by' is used to indicate the agent performing the action.

× An I see my life get better then.

✓ And I see my life getting better then.

The sentence has a typo 'An' instead of 'And' and incorrect verb form 'get' instead of 'getting' to express ongoing improvement.

× In every actions stemming from me

✓ In every action stemming from me

The word 'actions' is plural but preceded by 'every' which requires a singular noun 'action'.

× calls me to be more quickly at work

✓ calls me to be quicker at work

The adverb 'quickly' is incorrectly used; the adjective 'quicker' should be used to describe 'me' in this context.

× I just want here.

✓ I just want to be here.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the verb 'to be' to make sense.

× like I'm gonna get bored of doing so I. Quite. Impatient when I have to work for a task for long hours that I know, I know what exactly my goal is and I try to stay focused, try to do it no matter what difficulties.

✓ I feel like I'm going to get bored of doing so. I am quite impatient when I have to work on a task for long hours, but I know exactly what my goal is and I try to stay focused and do it no matter what difficulties.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper punctuation and structure. It needs to be split into clear sentences and corrected for clarity.

× I have to always be patient with my students when they raise some questions.

✓ I always have to be patient with my students when they raise some questions.

The adverb 'always' should be placed before the main verb 'have' for correct word order.

× I can get, I can get every. I have to become an explains. Detailing to them and I joined to like the fear happy at work.

✓ I can understand everything. I have to become an explainer, detailing things to them, and I enjoy being happy at work.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain incorrect word choices and structure. They need to be rewritten for clarity and correctness.

× In every actions stemming from me

✓ In every action stemming from me

The phrase 'every actions' is incorrect because 'every' requires a singular noun 'action'.

× I have an average Bart.

✓ I have an average temper.

The word 'Bart' is likely a typo for 'temper', which fits the context.

× I hadn't thought before that I could be a person with patience

✓ I hadn't thought before that I could be a patient person

The phrase 'a person with patience' is less natural than 'a patient person'. Also, 'hadn't thought' is correct past perfect tense.

× but now I am changing my life with. A better behavior?

✓ but now I am changing my life with better behavior.

The sentence has incorrect punctuation and an unnecessary question mark. It should be a statement with proper punctuation.