Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 좀 더 간결하고 명확하게 자신의 인내심에 대해 직접적으로 표현하고, 구체적인 예시를 들어 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For example, I always give my friends enough time to think before making decisions, and I never rush them.

提案: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 'lie to me'와 같은 올바른 표현을 사용하고, 감정을 구체적으로 설명하는 문장을 연습하세요.

例: I feel impatient when someone lies to me because honesty is very important to me. In such situations, I get upset and find it hard to stay calm.

提案: 답변이 불완전하고 문장이 끊겨서 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 자신의 감정을 명확히 표현하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I feel comfortable doing something for a long time if I enjoy it, like listening to music or working on documents. However, if I don't like the task, I get bored quickly.

提案: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'require patience'와 같은 올바른 표현을 사용하고, 직업과 인내심의 관계를 명확히 설명하세요.

例: Yes, my job as an English instructor requires a lot of patience because I often work with beginners who need time to improve their skills.

提案: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문장이 어색합니다. 과거와 현재를 비교하는 문장을 명확히 하고, 구체적인 예시를 들어 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. For instance, I can sit still for more than four hours, which helps me understand why children find it difficult to do so.

× I always can wait for my friends what I need to wait for their thinking or for their decision.

✓ I can always wait for my friends when I need to wait for their thinking or their decision.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing conjunction 'when' to connect clauses. Also, 'always' should be placed before the main verb 'can wait' for correct adverb placement.

× Someone who lies me.

✓ Someone who lies to me.

The verb 'lie' when meaning to tell an untruth is followed by the preposition 'to' before the indirect object. Omitting 'to' is incorrect.

× Because I really hate this someone who lies me.

✓ Because I really hate someone who lies to me.

The demonstrative pronoun 'this' is unnecessary here and should be removed. Also, 'lies me' should be 'lies to me' as explained before.

× I can't control by myself.

✓ I can't control myself.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used without the preposition 'by' in this context.

× I can't come down.

✓ I can't calm down.

The phrase 'come down' is incorrect here; the correct expression is 'calm down' meaning to become less upset.

× I feel K when I have to do something for a long time.

✓ I feel okay when I have to do something for a long time.

The letter 'K' is informal and unclear; it should be replaced with 'okay' for clarity and correctness.

× But it's up to it depends on if I like it or not, if I'm interested in music or something like.

✓ But it depends on whether I like it or not, if I'm interested in music or something like that.

The phrase 'it's up to it depends on' is redundant and incorrect. 'Whether' is the correct conjunction to introduce alternatives. Also, 'something like' should be 'something like that'.

× My job require my patience because I'm an English instructor.

✓ My job requires my patience because I'm an English instructor.

The subject 'job' is singular, so the verb should be 'requires' to agree in number.

× I need to wait them to be improve their English.

✓ I need to wait for them to improve their English.

The verb 'wait' requires the preposition 'for' before the object. Also, 'to be improve' is incorrect; it should be 'to improve'.

× That's why I need to require my.

✓ That's why I need to be patient.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'I need to be patient.' 'Require my' is incorrect usage.

× I was impatient too, and I was a child.

✓ I was impatient too when I was a child.

The conjunction 'and' is less appropriate here; 'when' better connects the clauses indicating time.

× It was more difficult to sit down for a long time, but now I can sit down more than four hours.

✓ It was more difficult to sit still for a long time, but now I can sit for more than four hours.

The phrase 'sit down' is incorrect here; 'sit still' or simply 'sit' is appropriate. Also, 'more than four hours' should be preceded by 'for' to indicate duration.

× That's why I can understand the children now that I that they can't sit.

✓ That's why I can understand children now that they can't sit still.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced words 'that I that'. Also, 'sit' should be 'sit still' to convey the intended meaning.