Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在错误，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和语法错误，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I'm not very patient. For example, when I wake up late, I rush to get ready and sometimes forget things because I'm in a hurry.

提案: 回答内容混乱，表达不清晰，建议使用简单明了的句子，明确说明原因，并避免无关或错误的词汇。

例: I feel impatient when I have limited time and too many things to do. It makes me stressed because I can't finish everything on time.

提案: 表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，建议用简单句表达感受，并给出具体原因和例子。

例: I feel tired when I have to do something for a long time because I can't do other things I enjoy, like watching TV or playing on my phone. It can be boring.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和拼写错误，建议注意时态和单复数，表达要简洁明了，突出耐心的重要性。

例: I am a student, so I don't have a job. But studying requires patience because I need to read carefully and understand details to do my homework correctly.

提案: 回答有语法错误，表达不够流畅，建议使用正确的时态和句型，清晰表达成长带来的变化。

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. When I was young, I didn't understand social rules or how to be polite, so I was more impatient with others. Now that I am older, I have learned to be more patient.

× I'm so impatient about everything's.

✓ I'm so impatient about everything.

这里的 everything 是不可数代词，不需要加所有格 's'，加了 's' 是错误的。

× For example when I.

✓ For example, when I get up late,

句子不完整，缺少谓语动词和后续内容，导致句子结构错误。需要补充完整。

× Why, uh, get up late and hurry to my classes?

✓ I get up late and hurry to my classes.

此处应使用陈述句形式，且主语缺失，导致时态和句子结构错误。

× I might be very hurried to arrange all the things in my bags and forgets everything's an rushes to the room.

✓ I might be very hurried to arrange all the things in my bags and forget everything and rush to the room.

forget 后面应接动词原形，且 rush 主语是 I，动词应用原形 rush 而非 rushes。everything 不加所有格。

× And the things are two mayonnaise to overtake a take over this.

✓ And the things are too many to take over this.

mayonnaise 是名词，意思是蛋黄酱，显然用错了，应该是 too many 表示“太多”。

× I don't have enough time and energies to arrange all this thing in our.

✓ I don't have enough time and energy to arrange all these things.

energy 是不可数名词，不用复数 energies；this thing 应用复数 these things；句尾 our 不完整，应删除。

× because all the things I like about this on my heart and I don't have enough time to do whatever I want to do and to enjoy it myself.

✓ because all the things I like weigh on my heart and I don't have enough time to do whatever I want to do and enjoy myself.

like about this on my heart 语义不通，改为 weigh on my heart 表达“压在心头”；enjoy it myself 改为 enjoy myself 更自然。

× Suggest watching TV were playing a mobile phone so it's probably boring.

✓ I suggest watching TV or playing on a mobile phone, so it's probably boring.

Suggest 后应接动名词；were 应为 or；playing 后应加介词 on；句子更通顺。

× However, is also require me to be patient because every time I do my homework I have to repay Asian enough to read the whole paragraph and an analyzed the detailed informations and do the correct.

✓ However, it also requires me to be patient because every time I do my homework I have to be patient enough to read the whole paragraph, analyze the detailed information, and do it correctly.

缺少主语 it；repay Asian 是错误表达，应为 be patient；an analyzed 应为 analyze；informations 是不可数名词 information；do the correct 应为 do it correctly。

× Other than when I was a child, I am not patient enough because I didn't know the social rules and I'm not know how to be polite with others.

✓ When I was a child, I was not patient enough because I didn't know the social rules and I didn't know how to be polite with others.

Other than 用法错误，应直接用 When 引导时间状语；am not 应为 was not；I'm not know 应为 I didn't know。

× So I see my things more impatient with others.

✓ So I was more impatient with others.

句子结构混乱，see my things 无意义，改为更符合语境的表达。

× Now I'm grow up, I will be come.

✓ Now I've grown up, I have become more patient.

I'm grow up 语法错误，应为 I've grown up；will be come 不是正确表达，应为 have become。