Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to make your sentences clearer and more natural by using correct grammar and avoiding redundancy. For example, say 'I consider myself a patient person because my parents are patient, and they influenced me. Also, patience is important when dealing with hard work.'

例: I consider myself a patient person because my parents are patient, and they influenced me. Also, patience is important when dealing with hard work.

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your thoughts. For example, say 'I feel impatient about the future because I don't know what will happen. Also, when I have important work tomorrow, I get stressed and impatient.'

例: I feel impatient about the future because I don't know what will happen. Also, when I have important work tomorrow, I get stressed and impatient.

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to make your answer more concise and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'I feel exhausted when I have to do something for a long time. For example, sitting in a meeting for several hours without breaks is very hard because I cannot move or do what I want.'

例: I feel exhausted when I have to do something for a long time. For example, sitting in a meeting for several hours without breaks is very hard because I cannot move or do what I want.

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to speak clearly and use correct grammar. Also, explain your ideas fully. For example, say 'I am a student, not working yet. In class, when I work with a partner who works slowly, it reminds me to be patient.'

例: I am a student, not working yet. In class, when I work with a partner who works slowly, it reminds me to be patient.

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to use correct verb forms and make your sentences clearer. For example, say 'Yes, I try to be more patient now because things don't always go our way. When I was a child, I had no choice but to be patient.'

例: Yes, I try to be more patient now because things don't always go our way. When I was a child, I had no choice but to be patient.

× Yes, I was described myself also a patient person because.

✓ Yes, I would describe myself as a patient person because.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is incorrectly used with 'was described'. The correct form is 'I would describe myself' to express personal description. Use 'would describe' for habitual or general statements.

× Growing up, my mom and my dad that you also pay a patient person as well.

✓ Growing up, my mom and my dad were also patient people.

The sentence structure is incorrect and unclear. 'That you also pay a patient person' is ungrammatical. Correct structure is 'my mom and my dad were also patient people' to express their qualities.

× So it's kind of like influenced me to becoming one.

✓ So it's kind of like influenced me to become one.

The verb 'influence' is followed by the infinitive 'to become', not the gerund 'to becoming'. Use 'to become' after 'influenced me'.

× And also it's a grading to have patience when you are dealed with hard work and some things that.

✓ And also it's a good thing to have patience when you are dealing with hard work and some things like that.

'Grading' is incorrect; likely meant 'good thing'. 'Dealed' is incorrect past tense; correct is 'dealing' (present participle) after 'are'. Added 'like that' to complete the thought.

× Future because I don't know what's gotten a come for me an what I'm going to face an also because it's kind of make me feel like something is bad is gonna come.

✓ The future, because I don't know what's going to come for me and what I'm going to face, and also because it kind of makes me feel like something bad is going to happen.

Sentence is fragmented and has incorrect verb forms. 'Gotten a come' is incorrect; use 'going to come'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Added articles and conjunctions for clarity.

× Sometimes it's just the feeling. You know when you have something important to do tomorrow, you just get stressed out. Specially if it's about work.

✓ Sometimes it's just a feeling. You know, when you have something important to do tomorrow, you just get stressed out, especially if it's about work.

'The feeling' should be 'a feeling' as it is indefinite. 'Specially' is a misspelling; correct is 'especially'. Added commas for clarity.

× I will feel exhausted if I have something to do for a long time because imagine spending eight hour a day without any break just to focus on one main thing is like for example when you are sitting in a meeting or something for like 4 to 5 hour, imagines what it would be like when you cannot move or do any things that you want to is so hard.

✓ I will feel exhausted if I have something to do for a long time because imagine spending eight hours a day without any break just to focus on one main thing. For example, when you are sitting in a meeting or something for like 4 to 5 hours, imagine what it would be like when you cannot move or do anything that you want to; it is so hard.

'Hour' should be plural 'hours' when referring to multiple hours. 'Imagines' should be 'imagine' to match imperative mood. 'Any things' should be 'anything'. Added punctuation to separate ideas.

× I don't work but I study an in the class.

✓ I don't work but I study in class.

'An in the class' is incorrect; correct preposition is 'in' and article 'the' is unnecessary before 'class' in this context.

× The teacher would assign this to work with a partner and sometimes when they do it.

✓ The teacher would assign us to work with a partner, and sometimes when they do it,

Sentence is incomplete and unclear. Added 'us' as object of 'assign' and completed the sentence structure for clarity.

× Funny, do it slowly.

✓ sometimes they do it slowly, which is funny.

Fragment 'Funny, do it slowly.' is incomplete. Rephrased to complete the thought and connect to previous sentence.

× It kind of like. It kind of remind me to knock the send off out of myself and be patient about it.

✓ It kind of reminds me to calm myself down and be patient about it.

'It kind of like' is incomplete; corrected to 'It kind of reminds me'. 'Knock the send off out of myself' is incorrect and unclear; replaced with 'calm myself down' for intended meaning.

× Yes, I tried to teach myself to be more patient because things doesn't always go our way right and the world doesn't wrap around our finger so I so in any way I have to.

✓ Yes, I try to teach myself to be more patient because things don't always go our way, right? And the world doesn't revolve around our finger, so in any way I have to.

'Tried' changed to 'try' to match present tense context. 'Doesn't' should be 'don't' to agree with plural subject 'things'. 'Wrap around' corrected to 'revolve around'. Sentence restructured for clarity.

× Then when I were child because there is nothing that could do.

✓ Back when I was a child, because there was nothing I could do.

'I were' is incorrect; correct is 'I was'. 'There is' should be 'there was' to match past tense. Added 'I' before 'could do' for completeness.