Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp và câu không mạch lạc. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I never give up easily when things get difficult. For example, I took the driving test several times and only passed on my sixth attempt. This experience taught me the importance of perseverance and staying optimistic. It also helped me remain calm in other challenges.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp và câu không mạch lạc. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu đơn giản, rõ ràng. Hãy dùng liên từ để câu trả lời có tính logic hơn.

例: I feel impatient in urgent situations when I don't have a clear solution immediately. For example, when I face a personal problem and don't know what to do next, I feel anxious until I find a way to solve it.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp, làm cho ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng từ vựng phù hợp và câu đơn giản, rõ ràng. Sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel tired and doubtful at first because I question my ability to succeed. However, after a while, I try to motivate myself by thinking about the benefits of finishing the task.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm câu trả lời thiếu tự nhiên và khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng từ vựng phù hợp và câu đơn giản, rõ ràng. Sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, patience is an important trait in my job because I work as an accountant. Every day, I have to deal with many detailed financial records that require high accuracy to avoid mistakes. Being patient helps me stay focused and complete my tasks efficiently.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng từ vựng phù hợp và câu đơn giản, rõ ràng. Sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. Over the years, I have faced many challenging situations, such as communicating with others and pursuing my goals. These experiences have helped me stay calm and focused.

× I took the driving test several times and only passed on my sick attempts.

✓ I took the driving test several times and only passed on my sixth attempt.

The word 'sick' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'sixth' to indicate the ordinal number of the attempt. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar tense error, but it affects clarity.

× These period taught me the importance of perseverance and staying optimistic.

✓ These periods taught me the importance of perseverance and staying optimistic.

The noun 'period' should be plural 'periods' to agree with the plural demonstrative 'these'. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1).

× We kept me remain calm and it'll might in other challenges too.

✓ They helped me remain calm and they might help in other challenges too.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'We kept me remain calm' is incorrect; the subject and verb do not agree and the modal verb usage is wrong. Correcting to 'They helped me remain calm' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'it'll might' is incorrect modal verb usage; 'they might help' is correct.

× Some urgent situations can make me view of impression because I often don't have a clear solution immediately.

✓ Some urgent situations can make me feel impatient because I often don't have a clear solution immediately.

The phrase 'make me view of impression' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'make me feel impatient'. This is a sentence structure and vocabulary error.

× It might and I'm unsure about what to do next.

✓ It might happen and I'm unsure about what to do next.

The phrase 'It might and I'm unsure' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Adding 'happen' completes the modal verb phrase 'might happen'.

× For example, when's areas certain problem o'clock in my personal life I feel answers an wrestlers until I fight a wage solve it did.

✓ For example, when there is a certain problem in my personal life, I feel anxious and restless until I find a way to solve it.

The original sentence is largely unintelligible due to incorrect word choice and sentence structure. The correction clarifies the intended meaning with proper grammar and vocabulary.

× When I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel answered and Atlas at first, since I usually sceptical myself.

✓ When I have to do something for a long time, I usually feel annoyed and restless at first, since I am usually skeptical about myself.

The words 'answered' and 'Atlas' are incorrect here; likely intended words are 'annoyed' and 'restless'. Also, 'sceptical myself' is incorrect; it should be 'skeptical about myself'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and vocabulary.

× Thus, I am a person who don't have capacity for doing anything successful.

✓ Thus, I am a person who doesn't have the capacity to do anything successfully.

The relative clause subject 'who' refers to 'I' (singular), so the verb should be 'doesn't' not 'don't'. Also, 'capacity for doing anything successful' is awkward; 'capacity to do anything successfully' is better.

× However, after while I tried to motivate myself by thinking about the benefits of fitness.

✓ However, after a while, I try to motivate myself by thinking about the benefits of persistence.

The phrase 'after while' needs the article 'a' to be 'after a while'. Also, tense should be present to match the habitual action. 'Benefits of fitness' is likely a miswording; 'benefits of persistence' fits the context better.

× Yes, patient is a people talk characteristic traits that is required in my job because I work as an accountant in every day I have to deal with many detailed financial record which requires highly accuracy to avoid mistakes.

✓ Yes, patience is a personal characteristic trait that is required in my job because I work as an accountant. Every day, I have to deal with many detailed financial records which require high accuracy to avoid mistakes.

'Patient' should be 'patience' (noun). 'People talk characteristic traits' is incorrect; 'personal characteristic trait' is correct. 'Financial record' should be plural 'financial records'. 'Requires highly accuracy' should be 'require high accuracy' to agree with plural subject and correct adjective use.

× So being person help me stay focused and complete my tasks efficiently. With.

✓ So being patient helps me stay focused and complete my tasks efficiently.

'Being person' is incorrect; it should be 'being patient'. The verb should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject. The sentence fragment 'With.' is incomplete and removed.

× Yes, I'm definitely more person knows that I was a trial.

✓ Yes, I'm definitely a more patient person than I was as a child.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'More person knows that I was a trial' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'more patient person than I was as a child'.

× Over the years I have failed many challenging situations such as making Mr. Ekwok communicating with other are tracing my objective.

✓ Over the years, I have faced many challenging situations such as communicating with others and pursuing my objectives.

'Failed many challenging situations' is incorrect; 'faced' is better. 'Making Mr. Ekwok communicating with other are tracing my objective' is unclear and ungrammatical; corrected to 'communicating with others and pursuing my objectives'.

× This. Situations helped me stay calm and focus.

✓ These situations helped me stay calm and focused.

'This. Situations' is incorrect; should be 'These situations'. Also, 'focus' should be 'focused' to match parallel structure with 'stay calm'.