Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to give a direct response with clear reasons and avoid incomplete sentences. Use simple linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: No, I am not a patient person because I dislike waiting for things. For example, I get frustrated when I have to wait in long lines.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and difficult to understand. Try to form complete sentences and explain your feelings clearly with linking words.

例: I feel most impatient when I am hungry because hunger makes me sensitive and easily irritated.

提案: Your answer needs to be more structured and clear. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your feelings and give examples.

例: I get tired quickly when I have to do something for a long time. For instance, if I study or work for hours, I lose my concentration and interest.

提案: Your answer is somewhat understandable but contains unnecessary words and incomplete sentences. Try to express your ideas clearly and politely with proper linking words.

例: Yes, my job requires patience because I have to wait until 7 pm even if there are no customers. Although I want to go home early, I have to be patient.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to use complete sentences and explain your thoughts logically with linking words.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. When I was young, I got angry easily because I wanted things immediately, but now I can wait calmly.

× I don't think I am a patient person because.

✓ I don't think I am a patient person because I don't like to wait.

The original sentence ends abruptly and is incomplete, causing a sentence structure error. To improve, complete the sentence by explaining the reason for not being patient.

× I don't want to wait the trim so I just.

✓ I don't want to wait for a long time, so I just...

The sentence is incomplete and missing preposition 'for' after 'wait'. Also, 'the trim' is unclear; likely intended 'a long time'. Complete the sentence for clarity.

× Society to work decided to work.

✓ I decided to work instead.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It seems the student meant to say they decided to work. Simplify and clarify the sentence.

× I feel impatient the most and I was.

✓ I feel impatient the most when I am hungry.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the preposition 'when' to indicate the condition causing impatience. Also, 'I was' is incomplete and unclear.

× And when I'm hungry.

✓ When I'm hungry,

This is a sentence fragment. It should be connected to the main clause to form a complete sentence.

× If I hungry, I.

✓ If I am hungry, I

The verb 'am' is missing after the subject 'I'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs continuation.

× Become very sensitive and impatient so.

✓ become very sensitive and impatient.

The sentence fragment 'so' at the end is unnecessary and makes the sentence incomplete. Remove 'so' to complete the sentence.

× I'm a person who get tired of something very quickly.

✓ I'm a person who gets tired of something very quickly.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'person' (singular), so the verb should be 'gets' to agree in number.

× Then I have to do something for our own time.

✓ Then I have to do something for a long time.

The phrase 'for our own time' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'for a long time'.

× Is it to lose my concentration? Anne. Interesting.

✓ I tend to lose my concentration and interest.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Combine and clarify the ideas into a complete sentence.

× Yes it does, because I need to wait. Group.

✓ Yes, it does, because I need to wait in a group.

The preposition 'in' is missing before 'a group'. Also, a comma is needed after 'Yes'.

× Until 7, even though there's no customer.

✓ until 7, even though there are no customers.

The sentence fragment needs to be connected to the previous sentence. Also, 'customer' should be plural 'customers' to match the context.

× I want to go home but I cannot.

✓ I want to go home, but I cannot.

Add a comma before 'but' to separate the clauses properly.

× Damn it.

✓ (Omitted as it is an interjection and not a grammatical sentence)

'Damn it' is an interjection and not a complete sentence; it can be omitted in formal correction.

× So I need to be patient too. Wait until 7.

✓ So I need to be patient too and wait until 7.

The second sentence is a fragment. Connect it with the previous sentence using 'and'.

× Yes, I am. When I was young.

✓ Yes, I am. When I was young,

The second sentence is a fragment and needs to be connected to the following clause.

× I don't wait for something.

✓ I didn't wait for something.

Since the speaker refers to the past ('when I was young'), the past tense 'didn't' should be used instead of present tense 'don't'.

× Anne. It's very easy to get angry because I can get.

✓ It was very easy to get angry because I couldn't get what I wanted immediately.

The sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Anne' is likely a mishearing or typo. Complete the sentence to express the intended meaning.

× Something directly. I couldn't get something directly, but now I didn't do that. I don't do that.

✓ I couldn't get things directly, but now I don't do that.

The sentences are fragmented and inconsistent in tense. Combine and correct tense for clarity.