Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に直接答え、簡潔で明確な文章を心がけましょう。例えば、"No, I am not a patient person because I get frustrated easily."のように答え、理由を付け加えると良いです。

例: No, I am not a patient person because I get frustrated easily when things don't go as planned.

提案: 内容は伝わりますが、文法と語彙の誤りが多く、繰り返しもあります。接続詞を使って論理的に話し、具体的な理由を明確に述べましょう。

例: Watching football makes me feel impatient because my favorite team is weak and often loses every weekend, which frustrates me.

提案: 単語の誤用（"frostnip"）や文法の誤りがあります。感情を表す語彙を正しく使い、理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

例: I feel frustrated when I have to do something for a long time because I can't stand repeating the same tasks over and over.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。仕事の内容と忍耐が必要な理由を簡潔に説明しましょう。

例: Yes, my job requires patience because I often have to deal with customers and solve their problems calmly.

提案: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。過去と現在の比較を明確にし、簡潔に答えましょう。

例: I was not patient as a child because I got angry easily, but I have become more patient as I have grown older.

× No really I'm I'm not emotional person becaused I can't.

✓ No, really, I'm not an emotional person because I can't.

The sentence is missing the article 'an' before 'emotional person' and contains spelling errors ('becaused' should be 'because'). Also, commas are needed for clarity. Articles are important before singular countable nouns.

× I can't have my laughing.

✓ I can't help laughing.

The phrase 'have my laughing' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'can't help laughing' to express inability to stop laughing.

× I don't like Quiet Place.

✓ I don't like quiet places.

'Quiet Place' should be plural and not capitalized unless referring to a specific title. Also, 'quiet' should be lowercase as it is a common adjective.

× I don't like that. Atmosphere, that is.

✓ I don't like that atmosphere.

The sentence is fragmented. Combining into one sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× Watching football makes me feel impatient 'cause my favorite craft is very weak so they raise every weekend.

✓ Watching football makes me feel impatient because my favorite club is very weak, so they lose every weekend.

'Craft' is incorrect; the correct word is 'club'. 'Raise' is incorrect in this context; 'lose' fits the meaning. Also, 'because' should be used instead of informal 'cause' in formal speech.

× So I'm I got frustration every weekend.

✓ So I get frustrated every weekend.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'I got frustration' should be 'I get frustrated' to match the habitual action.

× So. I become became impatient.

✓ So, I become impatient.

'Become' is present tense, 'became' is past tense. The sentence should use one tense consistently. Since the context is habitual, present tense 'become' is appropriate.

× It maybe makes me feel frostnip frustrated.

✓ It maybe makes me feel frustrated.

'Frostnip' is incorrect and unrelated. The correct adjective is 'frustrated'. Also, 'maybe' should be separated as 'may be' if intended.

× Becaused. I can't stand doing the same things. Over and over and over.

✓ Because I can't stand doing the same things over and over again.

'Becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. The phrase 'over and over and over' is better expressed as 'over and over again' for naturalness.

× So. I gotta be. Impatient.

✓ So, I have to be impatient.

'Gotta' is informal slang; 'have to' is the correct formal modal verb phrase. Also, punctuation should be corrected.

× Yes. My job is bought stuff.

✓ Yes. My job is buying stuff.

'Bought' is past tense; 'buying' is the correct present participle to describe ongoing action.

× It requires a. Emotions.

✓ It requires emotions.

'Emotions' is plural and uncountable here, so 'a' is incorrect. The article should be removed.

× So my memory responsibility is to serve.

✓ So my main responsibility is to serve.

'Memory responsibility' is incorrect; likely intended 'main responsibility'.

× Wines or right? Talking with friends.

✓ Wine or writing? Talking with friends.

'Wines or right' is unclear and likely a mishearing or misspelling. Possibly meant 'wine or writing'. Clarification needed.

× Not really. I was quiet. Emotionally, child.

✓ Not really. I was a quiet, emotional child.

'Quiet' and 'emotional' are adjectives describing 'child', which is singular and countable, so 'a' is needed. Also, adjectives should be in correct order without unnecessary punctuation.

× And I was so angry all the time.

✓ And I was angry all the time.

'So' is unnecessary here and can be omitted for clarity.

× So I was not the patient.

✓ So I was not patient.

'Patient' is an adjective here; 'the' is unnecessary and incorrect.

× I am got age.

✓ As I got older,

'I am got age' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'As I got older' to express aging.

× I became a patient person.

✓ I became a patient person.

This sentence is correct as is.