Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
When do you usually eat snacks now?
受験者
I usually have a snacks twice a day, one in the morning and 1:00 in the afternoon around 2:00 PM. It helps me keep my energy level up during the day. I usually have a piece of fruits or cake with coffee for my snack.
試験官
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
受験者
Yes, having healthier snacks like fruit or yogurt can keep you fall between meals and uh, help you to not crave sugar and over eat dinner or lunch.
試験官
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
受験者
Yes, when I was younger I used to eat a snacks that were not healthy such as ice cream. But uh now I'm more mindful about my snacks and try to eat healthier snacks such as fruit or yogurt.
試験官
What snacks do you like to eat?
受験者
I like to eat healthy snacks that are low calorie such as yogurt or fruit. It is delicious and also keep me full between meals and help me avoid overeating or craving sugar.
評価
総合
Part 1
When do you usually eat snacks now?
スコア: 72.0提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition about times, and use correct singular/plural and prepositions. Add a linking word when giving reasons and use specific examples of snacks.
例: I usually have snacks twice a day — once in the mid-morning and once in the afternoon around 2:00 PM. For example, I often eat a piece of fruit or a small slice of cake with coffee, which helps me maintain my energy between meals.
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
スコア: 68.0提案: Correct grammar and clarity: use precise verbs and remove filler sounds. Begin with a direct opinion, then explain with linking words (because, therefore) and specific outcomes. Fix the phrase 'keep you fall' to 'keep you full' and 'over eat' to 'overeat'.
例: Yes, I think eating healthy snacks is beneficial because snacks like fruit or yogurt keep you full between meals and therefore reduce cravings for sugary foods and the likelihood of overeating at lunch or dinner.
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
スコア: 75.0提案: Use past and present tenses clearly and avoid fillers. Give a clear topic sentence about your past habit, then contrast with your current habit using a linking word (but, however). Be specific about how often or why you changed.
例: Yes, when I was younger I often ate unhealthy snacks like ice cream and candy. However, now I'm more mindful of my diet and usually choose healthier options such as fruit or yogurt because I want to stay fit.
What snacks do you like to eat?
スコア: 74.0提案: Avoid vague pronouns and ensure subject-verb agreement. Start with a clear statement of preference, then give reasons using linking words and a specific example of a favorite snack. Replace 'It is delicious' with a more specific description.
例: I prefer healthy, low-calorie snacks such as yogurt and fresh fruit. For instance, a bowl of Greek yogurt with berries is tasty, keeps me full between meals, and helps me avoid sugar cravings and overeating.
文法
× I usually have a snacks twice a day, one in the morning and 1:00 in the afternoon around 2:00 PM.
✓ I usually have a snack twice a day, once in the morning and once in the afternoon around 2:00 PM.
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