Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有多处语法错误和词汇使用不当，如“snakes”应为“snacks”，“toxic decay”表达不准确。建议注意单词拼写和语法结构，避免重复和冗长，回答应更简洁自然。

例: I used to eat snacks before breakfast or dinner when I was a child, which caused dental problems. But now, I rarely eat snacks because I believe they are unhealthy.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如“he's eating a lot of snakes”应为“eating a lot of snacks”，且句子结构混乱。建议使用正确的语法和更清晰的表达，避免错误的代词和词汇。

例: No, I don't think eating too many snacks is healthy. For example, consuming a lot of candies can lead to obesity and even heart disease.

提案: 回答中时态使用错误，如“eat”应为“ate”，且句子不完整，表达不流畅。建议注意时态一致，句子完整，并使用连贯的表达。

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but my parents didn't allow me to eat too many because they thought it was bad for my teeth. I didn't understand this rule when I was six, but now I do.

提案: 回答中词汇使用不当，如“very like”应为“really like”，“climb down”应为“calm down”，句子不完整。建议使用正确的词汇和完整句子表达情感和原因。

例: I really like eating candies because I think they help me relax and calm down. When I face difficulties, like failing a test, I usually eat a candy to feel better.

× I usually eat snakes before I eating breakfast or dinner and so it makes me have a lot of toxic decay.

✓ I usually eat snacks before I eat breakfast or dinner, and so it causes me to have a lot of tooth decay.

“snakes”应为“snacks”，表示零食，复数形式正确；“toxic decay”应为“tooth decay”，牙齿蛀坏。

× I usually eat snakes before I eating breakfast or dinner and so it makes me have a lot of toxic decay.

✓ I usually eat snacks before I eat breakfast or dinner, and so it causes me to have a lot of tooth decay.

“I eating”中“eating”应改为动词原形“eat”，因为在“before I”后面需要用动词原形。

× But now I'm almost do not eat snake because I think it's a bad way to our health.

✓ But now I almost do not eat snacks because I think it's bad for our health.

“I'm almost do not eat”结构错误，应为“I almost do not eat”或“I almost never eat”。“a bad way to our health”应改为“bad for our health”，表示对健康有害。

× But now I'm almost do not eat snake because I think it's a bad way to our health.

✓ But now I almost do not eat snacks because I think it's bad for our health.

“snake”应为复数“snacks”，表示零食。

× No I'm not. I think he's eating a lot of snakes have a lot of negative impact to our health.

✓ No, I don't. I think eating a lot of snacks has a lot of negative impacts on our health.

“No I'm not”应为“No, I don't”，回答否定句时用助动词。 “he's eating”不符合语境，应直接用动名词“eating”。“snakes”应为“snacks”。“have”应改为“has”，主谓一致。 “impact to”应为“impact on”。

× No I'm not. I think he's eating a lot of snakes have a lot of negative impact to our health.

✓ No, I don't. I think eating a lot of snacks has a lot of negative impacts on our health.

“snakes”应为“snacks”，表示零食。

× No I'm not. I think he's eating a lot of snakes have a lot of negative impact to our health.

✓ No, I don't. I think eating a lot of snacks has a lot of negative impacts on our health.

主语“eating a lot of snacks”是单数，谓语动词应为“has”。

× No I'm not. I think he's eating a lot of snakes have a lot of negative impact to our health.

✓ No, I don't. I think eating a lot of snacks has a lot of negative impacts on our health.

“impact to”应改为“impact on”，表示对健康的影响。

× Yes, I often eat snake when I was young but my parents don't allowed me to eat a lot of snakes and I don't know why because they think it's a bad way to for our tooth healthy.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but my parents didn't allow me to eat a lot of snacks and I didn't know why because they thought it was bad for our tooth health.

描述过去的动作应使用过去时，“eat”改为“ate”，“don't allowed”应为“didn't allow”，“think”改为“thought”，“it's”改为“it was”。

× Yes, I often eat snake when I was young but my parents don't allowed me to eat a lot of snakes and I don't know why because they think it's a bad way to for our tooth healthy.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but my parents didn't allow me to eat a lot of snacks and I didn't know why because they thought it was bad for our tooth health.

“snake”应为复数“snacks”，表示零食。

× Yes, I often eat snake when I was young but my parents don't allowed me to eat a lot of snakes and I don't know why because they think it's a bad way to for our tooth healthy.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but my parents didn't allow me to eat a lot of snacks and I didn't know why because they thought it was bad for our tooth health.

“a bad way to for our tooth healthy”结构错误，应为“bad for our tooth health”，表示对牙齿健康有害。

× I can't understand this requirement when I was six years old but now I think it's.

✓ I couldn't understand this requirement when I was six years old, but now I think I understand.

过去时间点应使用过去时，“can't”改为“couldn't”。句子不完整，补充“ I think I understand”。

× I very like eating candies because I think eating candies is a good way to relax and climb down.

✓ I really like eating candies because I think eating candies is a good way to relax and calm down.

“very like”用法错误，应为“really like”。“climb down”应为“calm down”，表示冷静下来。

× I very like eating candies because I think eating candies is a good way to relax and climb down.

✓ I really like eating candies because I think eating candies is a good way to relax and calm down.

“climb down”是错误搭配，应为“calm down”，表示放松。

× When I suffer from the difficulty things like failure of the test, I always ate a candy to let me.

✓ When I suffer from difficult things like failing a test, I always eat a candy to comfort myself.

“always ate”应为一般现在时“always eat”，因为“when I suffer”是现在时态。句子不完整，补充“to comfort myself”。