Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรปรับปรุงเรื่องความถูกต้องของไวยากรณ์และการใช้คำ เช่น 'cleans' ควรเป็น 'clean' และควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยคให้ลื่นไหลมากขึ้น เช่น 'because' และ 'so'. นอกจากนี้ ควรหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำและทำให้ประโยคกระชับขึ้น

例: I usually eat snacks after dinner because they help clean my taste buds from savory flavors, so it's a pleasant way to end the meal.

提案: คำตอบของคุณดีแล้ว แต่ควรปรับปรุงเรื่องการใช้คำ เช่น 'weight gaining' ควรเป็น 'weight gain' และใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยคให้ชัดเจนขึ้น เช่น 'if' และ 'however'. นอกจากนี้ ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและหลากหลายมากขึ้น

例: If snacks are eaten in moderation, I believe they are not harmful because they provide quick energy. However, consuming too many snacks high in sugar or sodium can cause health issues like weight gain and poor nutrition.

提案: คำตอบของคุณมีโครงสร้างดี แต่ควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยคให้ลื่นไหล เช่น 'because' และ 'so'. นอกจากนี้ ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์เล็กน้อย เช่น 'believe' ควรเป็น 'believed' เพราะพูดถึงอดีต

例: Not really. When I was young, my parents encouraged me to eat fruits and vegetables instead of sweets because they believed it was healthier. So, I think this helped me develop good eating habits, and I want to teach the same to my future children.

提案: คำตอบนี้ควรปรับปรุงเรื่องความถูกต้องของไวยากรณ์และการใช้คำ เช่น 'more healthy' ควรเป็น 'healthier' และ 'less in sugar' ควรเป็น 'contains less sugar'. ควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยคให้ดีขึ้น และทำให้ประโยคกระชับขึ้น

例: I'd say I prefer sweets, especially chocolate, because I've eaten it since I was a kid. However, I'm changing my habit from eating milk or white chocolate to dark chocolate because it is healthier and contains less sugar.

× I regularly have some snacks after a meal, especially after dinner because it helps cleans my taste bud from savory and I think it's a good way to end the meal.

✓ I regularly have some snacks after a meal, especially after dinner because it helps clean my taste buds from savory and I think it's a good way to end the meal.

The verb 'cleans' is incorrectly used here; after 'helps', the base form of the verb should be used, which is 'clean'. Also, 'taste bud' should be plural 'taste buds' because it refers to multiple buds. This is a verb form and singular/plural issue.

× I regularly have some snacks after a meal, especially after dinner because it helps cleans my taste bud from savory and I think it's a good way to end the meal.

✓ I regularly have some snacks after a meal, especially after dinner because it helps clean my taste buds from savory and I think it's a good way to end the meal.

The phrase 'taste bud' should be plural 'taste buds' because it refers to multiple taste receptors in the mouth. Using singular here is incorrect.

× If snacks are eaten in the right amount, I believe they are not very harmful to health because they can provide quick energy.

✓ If snacks are eaten in the right amounts, I believe they are not very harmful to health because they can provide quick energy.

The phrase 'in the right amount' should be plural 'in the right amounts' because 'snacks' is plural and different types or quantities can be considered. Using singular 'amount' is less appropriate here.

× However, eating too much snacks, especially those high in sugar or sodium, can lead to health problems like weight gaining or poor nutrition.

✓ However, eating too many snacks, especially those high in sugar or sodium, can lead to health problems like weight gain or poor nutrition.

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'snacks' is countable plural, so 'many' should be used. Also, 'weight gaining' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'weight gain'.

× However, eating too much snacks, especially those high in sugar or sodium, can lead to health problems like weight gaining or poor nutrition.

✓ However, eating too many snacks, especially those high in sugar or sodium, can lead to health problems like weight gain or poor nutrition.

The phrase 'weight gaining' is incorrect; the correct noun form is 'weight gain'.

× Not really. When I was young my parents encouraged me to eat fruits and vegetables instead of sweets because they believe it was healthy and I think this helped me develop good eating habits.

✓ Not really. When I was young my parents encouraged me to eat fruits and vegetables instead of sweets because they believed it was healthy and I think this helped me develop good eating habits.

The verb 'believe' should be in past tense 'believed' to match the past context of 'When I was young' and 'encouraged'. Mixing past and present tense here is incorrect.

× So I want to teach this to my future children as well.

✓ So I want to teach this to my future children as well.

No correction needed. The pronoun usage is correct here.

× I'd say I prefer sweets, especially chocolate, because I've been consuming it since I was a kid.

✓ I'd say I prefer sweets, especially chocolate, because I've been consuming it since I was a kid.

No correction needed. The quantifiers and pronouns are used correctly.

× However, I'm changing the habits of eating milk or white chocolate to the dark one because it's more healthy and less in sugar.

✓ However, I'm changing the habit of eating milk or white chocolate to dark chocolate because it's healthier and contains less sugar.

'Habits' should be singular 'habit' because it refers to a specific behavior. 'More healthy' is incorrect; the comparative form is 'healthier'. 'Less in sugar' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'contains less sugar'. Also, 'the dark one' is better expressed as 'dark chocolate' for clarity.