Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about the times you eat snacks.

例: I usually eat snacks on weekdays, especially after studying. When I feel stressed, I like to have some sweet snacks to help me relax and feel better.

提案: Your answer repeats the same idea several times and lacks clarity. Try to provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to organize your thoughts logically.

例: Yes, I think eating snacks in moderation is healthy because it helps improve my mood and reduce stress. Eating a small amount of snacks occasionally benefits my mental health.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and try to form complete sentences. Provide specific examples and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. Like most children, I loved sweet snacks, especially chocolate, which I enjoyed eating after dinner because it tasted delicious.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to complete your sentences and explain your preferences clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons for your choice.

例: I like to eat matcha chocolate because the slight bitterness of matcha balances well with the sweetness of chocolate, creating a moderate and pleasant flavor.

× Maybe at the weekday or after learning because when I feel stress I want some sweet snacks to let me relax myself.

✓ Maybe on weekdays or after studying because when I feel stressed I want some sweet snacks to help me relax.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect with 'weekday'; the correct preposition is 'on' for days. 'The weekday' is also incorrect; 'weekdays' is the proper plural form. 'After learning' is unnatural; 'after studying' is better. 'Feel stress' should be 'feel stressed' to use the adjective form. 'To let me relax myself' is awkward; 'to help me relax' is clearer and more natural.

× So I will eat snacks after some stress time and I think it is helpful.

✓ So I will eat snacks after some stressful times and I think it is helpful.

The phrase 'after some stress time' is unnatural. 'Stressful times' is a better expression to describe periods of stress. Also, 'stressful' is the correct adjective form here.

× Yes I do. I think it is healthy. I just eat a little bit so it can make me feel better mentally. So I think it is healthy, especially at the mental place.

✓ Yes, I do. I think it is healthy. I just eat a little bit so it can make me feel better mentally. So I think it is healthy, especially for my mental health.

The phrase 'at the mental place' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'for my mental health' to indicate the mental aspect being referred to.

× Absolutely yes. Which children can reject the sweet snack snacks? So and especially I really like chocolate for my dinner after dinner snacks.

✓ Absolutely yes. Which children can reject sweet snacks? Especially, I really like chocolate as an after-dinner snack.

The phrase 'the sweet snack snacks' is redundant; 'sweet snacks' is sufficient. 'For my dinner after dinner snacks' is awkward; 'as an after-dinner snack' is clearer. Also, 'So and especially' is incorrect and unnecessary.

× It is very delicious for me.

✓ It is very delicious to me.

The phrase 'delicious for me' is less common; 'delicious to me' is the more natural prepositional phrase to express personal taste.

× Absolutely Macha chocolate because the matcha is a little bit bitter and the chocolate is sweet and their combination is. More moderate and.

✓ Absolutely matcha chocolate because the matcha is a little bit bitter and the chocolate is sweet, and their combination is more balanced.

The sentence is fragmented and incomplete. 'Macha' is a misspelling of 'matcha'. The phrase 'their combination is. More moderate and.' is incomplete and unclear. It should be combined into a complete sentence: 'their combination is more balanced.'