Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้ภาษาอังกฤษที่เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น คำว่า 'straight' ที่ใช้ไม่ถูกต้อง ควรตอบตรงประเด็นและใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและสั้นลงเพื่อความเข้าใจที่ดีขึ้น

例: I usually eat snacks when I feel tired or stressed, especially during class. For example, I often eat chocolate because it helps me feel happier and gives me more energy.

提案: คำตอบนี้ควรมีโครงสร้างที่ชัดเจนและใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง รวมถึงการเชื่อมโยงประโยคให้สมเหตุสมผล ควรอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจนและใช้คำที่เหมาะสมกับบริบท

例: I think eating snacks can be healthy if you choose the right ones. For example, snacks like fruits or nuts are good for your body because they provide nutrients and energy.

提案: ควรตอบคำถามโดยตรงและใช้ประโยคที่ถูกต้องตามหลักไวยากรณ์ รวมถึงเพิ่มรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนและเชื่อมโยงประโยคให้ลื่นไหลมากขึ้น

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, when I visited friends' houses, they usually gave me snacks because children are often treated kindly.

提案: ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและประโยคที่ชัดเจน รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำที่ไม่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'in the bank' และ 'the fry is not that high' ควรอธิบายรสชาติและความชอบอย่างชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ

例: In Thailand, we have many flavored potato chips. My favorite is the original flavor because it is sour and crunchy. I enjoy eating them often because they taste great and are affordable.

× I always eat snack when I feel straight from starting, you know, in class if I feel a little straight, I might take some chocolate and buy it because it can make you feel happier.

✓ I always eat snacks when I feel stressed from the start, you know, in class if I feel a little stressed, I might take some chocolate and buy it because it can make you feel happier.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to a general habit of eating more than one snack. Also, 'straight' is incorrect here; the intended word is likely 'stressed'.

× And it's gained a lot of energy for me by buying some chocolate and that's really helpful for me.

✓ And it gives me a lot of energy when I buy some chocolate and that's really helpful for me.

The phrase 'it's gained a lot of energy for me' is incorrect because 'it' (chocolate) does not gain energy; rather, it provides energy to the person. Also, 'gained' is past tense, but the sentence is about a general fact, so present tense 'gives' is appropriate.

× If you just choose the snack that healthier free that healthy for your body, you know is have some kind of snack that they view for for the group then or something is can be good for their bodies.

✓ If you just choose snacks that are healthier and good for your body, you know, there are some kinds of snacks that are good for the group or something that can be good for their bodies.

The original sentence has incorrect adjective usage and unclear structure. 'Healthier free that healthy' is incorrect; it should be 'healthier and good'. Also, 'is have' is incorrect; it should be 'there are'.

× So I think it's not that bad for eating snack for him.

✓ So I think it's not that bad to eat snacks for him.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to eating in general. Also, 'for eating snack' is awkward; 'to eat snacks' is more natural.

× Yes, as always eat snack when I was young for example like I go to some people house and they gave me snack because I was a child.

✓ Yes, I always ate snacks when I was young. For example, when I went to some people's houses, they gave me snacks because I was a child.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to multiple instances. Also, verb tenses are corrected to past tense to match 'when I was young'. 'People house' should be 'people's houses' to show possession and plural.

× You know people love child and they always gave snack to children and that why I ate a lot of snack when I was young.

✓ You know, people love children and they always gave snacks to children and that's why I ate a lot of snacks when I was young.

'Child' should be plural 'children' because it refers to multiple children. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'. 'That why' should be 'that's why' to be grammatically correct.

× In Thailand we have some potato chips in the bank and it's have a very a lot of flavor.

✓ In Thailand, we have some potato chips in the brand and they have a lot of flavors.

'Bank' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'brand'. 'It's have' is incorrect; it should be 'they have' because 'potato chips' is plural. 'A very a lot of flavor' is incorrect; 'a lot of flavors' is correct.

× My favorite was the original 1 and I really like this potato chip because of the sour and the crunchy.

✓ My favorite is the original one and I really like these potato chips because of the sourness and the crunchiness.

'Was' should be 'is' to indicate current preference. 'Potato chip' should be plural 'potato chips' because it refers to the snack in general. 'The sour and the crunchy' should be 'the sourness and the crunchiness' to use correct noun forms.

× It's really amazing for me to eat every time and the fry is not that high for me to buy it.

✓ It's really amazing for me to eat every time and the fat content is not that high for me to buy it.

'The fry' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'fat' or 'fried content'. 'Fry' is a verb or noun for cooking method, not a noun for content. 'Fat content' is appropriate here.