Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and a bit repetitive. Try to respond directly to the question about your current snacking habits first, then briefly mention past habits if relevant. Use clear and concise sentences without redundancy.

例: I don't usually eat snacks these days, but when I was a teenager, I used to have chocolate almost every day, especially white and dark chocolate.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some awkward phrases. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons, using linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I think eating snacks frequently is unhealthy because many studies show negative effects. However, people often snack when they feel stressed, which makes it hard to avoid.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to structure your response clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, avoiding repeated words.

例: Yes, I used to snack a lot when I was younger, especially chocolate every day. However, I stopped snacking a few years ago to stay healthy and fit.

提案: Your answer is good but could be more concise and avoid repeating the word 'texture'. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Chocolate is my favourite snack, but I also enjoy jellies because I like their sweet taste and chewy texture.

× it's been a while since I tried to snack last time

✓ it's been a while since I tried snacking last time

The phrase 'since I tried to snack' is awkward because 'try' followed by an infinitive implies an attempt rather than habitual action. Using the gerund 'snacking' better expresses the action of eating snacks. Also, 'last time' is redundant with 'since'. A better phrasing would be 'it's been a while since I last snacked.'

× when I was little little bit younger

✓ when I was a little bit younger

The phrase 'little little bit' is a repetition and incorrect. The correct expression is 'a little bit' to indicate a small amount of time or degree.

× white chocolate and dark chocolate were to go snacks for me

✓ white chocolate and dark chocolate were go-to snacks for me

The phrase 'to go snacks' is incorrect. The correct idiom is 'go-to snacks' meaning preferred or favourite snacks. Also, 'go-to' is a compound adjective and should be hyphenated.

× Passing with God, I mean, it's not only my thoughts, but also it's there's a lot of studies that really indicate the bad outcomes and by the facts of snacking a lot

✓ Pardon me, I mean, it's not only my opinion, but there are also many studies that indicate the negative effects of frequent snacking

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect phrases like 'Passing with God' and 'it's there's'. The correction clarifies the intended meaning and corrects grammar and word choice for clarity and correctness.

× in our genes and our self consciousness, snacking is a thing that you always go for when you're under distress

✓ in our genes and self-consciousness, snacking is something we always turn to when we're under distress

The phrase 'our self consciousness' should be 'self-consciousness' (hyphenated) and 'you always go for' is informal and inconsistent with 'our genes'. Using 'we always turn to' maintains consistency and clarity.

× I mentioned yes, snacking was a was a thing for me even like 2-3 years ago

✓ I mentioned yes, snacking was a thing for me even 2-3 years ago

The phrase 'was a was a thing' contains a repeated verb 'was a'. Removing the repetition corrects the sentence.

× I quit snacking as growing up I realized to maintain my healthiness and fitness

✓ I quit snacking as I grew up and realized I needed to maintain my health and fitness

The phrase 'as growing up I realized to maintain my healthiness' is ungrammatical. 'Growing up' should be 'I grew up', and 'healthiness' is better expressed as 'health'. Also, 'realized to maintain' is incorrect; it should be 'realized I needed to maintain'.

× definitely I was a big snack boy who loved to eat eat chocolate every day

✓ definitely I was a big snack boy who loved to eat chocolate every day

The phrase 'eat eat' is a repetition and should be corrected to a single 'eat'.

× if I have to mention the second most favorite then it would be jellies

✓ if I have to mention my second most favourite, then it would be jellies

The phrase 'the second most favorite' lacks a noun and possessive pronoun. Adding 'my' and changing 'favorite' to 'favourite' (British English) improves clarity and correctness.

× it's not only because I like the texture of it, but it's also I like the sweetness and the texture so I love that gooey and gummy taste

✓ it's not only because I like the texture of it, but also because I like the sweetness and the texture, so I love that gooey and gummy taste

The phrase 'but it's also I like' is ungrammatical. It should be 'but also because I like' to correctly connect the two reasons.